Lovers part, worlds crashing down
Shattered hearts, self-doubt abounds
Still, we love
Marathon, the endless road
Can't go on, legs feel so old
Still, we run
Throbbing pain, hospital room
Breathing strained, sense of doom
Still, we smile
Daily toil, sun breathes its fire
Tilling soil, sweaty and tired
Still, we work
Where is God? Where has he gone?
Suffering goes on and on
Still, we pray
Every time
It looks as though
Humanity is at an end
I look to
The times we show
We can adversity transcend
And still, I hope
Author notes
I wrote this about a year ago, when I was going through an especially tough time. I still believe this.
A contest entry
- Hope For Tomorrow by CherryOnTop.
2200 points, ended January 6, 2008, 22 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Finally Get the Medal You Deserve! by TabbyCat.
475 points, ended February 14, 2008, 23 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Poetically you speak to my heart. WOW!
This is so very true...I know... I've been there and back again. The feelings conveyed is beyond anything I've connected to. I'm so happy that I had a blessed opportunity to read your work.
Thank you so much for sharing, you touch the very heart of me.
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Thanks for the lovely comment. Good night!
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I almost want to cry, that was so sad, but so beautiful.
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Though at times it may not feel like it God is always there, sometimes I belive he puts us through pain, so we better know how to handle it the next time it happens. if we never know pain, we will be unable to cope with it when it does come.
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"But, ah", the cynic would say, "if there was no pain, then we wouldn't need to learn how to cope with it."
But I know, and agree, with what you're saying. The 'Divine Framework' is set up to be the crucible through which we all must pass, to chip away the imperfections, like metaphysical erosion, and burnish our rusty selves to reveal an evolved, strong, full-formed child of the universe.
Or something like that.
Thanks for the comment.
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Interesting I love your metaphors and your style!
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I believe this too and I believe the hopers and the dreamers are the ones who keep the world going. There is so much crap in the world that without people like it would go mad! Thanks for sharing and good luck!
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Lovely.
I was impressed by the intertwining rhyme schemes throughout this piece. Well written. Leaves the reader with an emotional response. Strong last line that carries the theme of the poem to its conclusion. Fulfilling. Thanks for entering.
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Congrads on the trophy! This is well done and the refrains are perfect. I think I agree with you; I believe it too.
Love,
Amera♥
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I really, really liked this one. The flow of the first two "sentences" of each of the little paragraphs...
I very much like how each one has "Still we..."
It seems to explain so much... things that people most generally know, but don't think about or do think about, but ignore. IDK.
It's utterly awesome.
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...there is always hope. We can, adversity transcend and reach the levels of learning that we are able.
This has such perseverance written within the lines. Nicely done. ~Pamela
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This is good, the force is with you. The final line - all any of us can do, really.
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Thank you for the lovely comment. Meeting so many beautiful people in AP has given me new hope.
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"still I hope"
I love that - so simply stated, yet rich with meaning.
Excellent entry.
Thank you.
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This is a lovely ready. Very smooth and lyrical. And even the poem in itself runs in a way as to say: "Hey, don't give up." Only to further elaborate on the meaning of every stanza.
Thank you for sharing.
-Reni
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Wow, this is quite amazing...insightful, enlightening, optimistic..so true!
Hope is such a beautiful thing, especially when you can recognize it through it all...
Wonderful piece!
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Thank you for your lovely comment.
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Thank you and good luck in my contest.
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A testimony to perseveranvce.
It is truly at our darkest moments that our actions define us. When we can face the toughest abstacles and continue to push forward, we are strong. Good luck in the contest, this was a wonderful read.
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