to deflower the labyrinth of the old metaphysical mystery,
raw eyes drowned in determination, in a force of magnetic vision.
devotion of this delicate ritual, creation of blood instinct transformed
human visual impressions, I feel, in divine visions of ethereal inhabitant.
put on as red-hot hydrogen, wandered one century uselessly,
in shear ambitious sidereal...perhaps to rose the very heights,
with the soul in dark, necessary to still raise more.
Author notes
You want TEXT. Either read it as prose or poetry..the same is here for your eyes.
Prompt: Quote:
“As long as I can remember I feel I have had this great creative and spiritual force within me
that is greater than faith, greater than ambition, greater than confidence,
greater than determination, greater than vision. It is all these combined.
My brain becomes magnetized with this dominating force
which I hold in my hand.”
-Bruce Lee-
& Picture
A contest entry
- - What Drives You? - by Desire.
700 points, ended December 27, 2007, 7 entries
Honorable mention
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The contest information in the Author's notes helps alot ~ at first I was a bit confused ~ but I get it (I think) .... I'm going to give ya my two cents whirl on my thoughts of what you mean~ ..... If i'm off based please let me know ~ I love having better understanding of what I'm reading ~
I think ~ your are saying that often times the determination of the young ~ to have achievements within their "world" or "life" ~ They tend to look at things differently ~ then what people are used to ~ ... Almost like Bill Gates in his younger days ~ where he's hungry for success.... He views things differently and brings change... Fortunantly he brings it to entire way of life ~ throughout the world ~ I know people crack jokes ~ but if you think of it ~ it's a hell of an accomplishment ~ I think there are lots of younger people who can bring change by showing others that things can be different and better ~ ....
Okay that's what I got out of it ~ lol ~ the poem/write ~ is a little complex in thought ~ I hope that I am somewhat on the money ~ Nice job
Thanks for entering the "Set the Bar" contest ~ I really appreciate you sharing your work with me ~ Good luck to you! -
Thank You!!
Thank You for Your entry: Magnetic Vision
Wonderful piece You have penned and Powerful images brought forth
These lines grabbed and tugged:
to deflower the labyrinth of the old metaphysical mystery,
raw eyes drowned in determination, in a force of magnetic vision.
Thank You for sharing Your Spirit and voice!
Best wishes to You in the contest
**Judging will be done shortly
Many blessings to You Sweet Soul
and much love~ Desire~*~
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