Where sinister bars were scorned by her ivory vessel
--Darkness raised her; light gave her breath
Where spirits cursed to eternity wither into but whispers
--Held sacred in scattered thoughts along the wind's beaten path
Where destiny meets an untimely fate with hope sealed away
--Shadows weave intricate secrets in endless corridors
Where ghosts tell the tale of two unlikely warriors
--She pieced together of glass, he in youth's grasp
Where the promise was made; and indeed it did not break
--As two hands met, two forsaken souls were saved
Where even death may not part the bond
--And darkness cannot conceal their light
Where it is their Eternity, and their World alone
--Within their woven hands, they hold Hope
Waves beat along the shores where dreams are forever more...
Author notes
This was created to be for a game [I've already made a couple of poems for it , but it's just too awesome and I'm too much of a nerd ]
It also came out as kinda the opposite of my previous poem--hence the ending
Which is possibly the beginning of another poem, depends on if my muse agrees with me or not, and it the writer's block is truly gone or just teasing me
Honest opinions please ^-^
Again, I will take suggestions for a better title
Video Game:Ico
And I am 15!
A contest entry
- Video Game Lovers by nathan8.
610 points, ended May 23, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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wow i reall like this poem and how you use the elemnt of darkness it is really great and i love the flow and its just amazing and the two lines before the last one i think stood out the most rang with resonance too loud to ingore. You did an amazing job on this poem is defnitely another favoirte of mines by you.
GoshNephloom is so talentered !!!
~Silky
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i really like the flow of this poem the rhyming is great and the story tells a lot, i like the detials you have added, i've never heard of this game, thank you for enterting nathan's contest and keep up the great writing, -Amy
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nice-nathan8
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I really liked this poem,"Shadows weave intricate secrets in endless corridors", that would have'd to be my favorite line, good write, and thanks for your compliments on my poem.
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You know that voice who appears in movie promos during the clips of the movie. Well, that is what I got from this. Dude. You could make a killing by selling this to Hobowood!
In all seriousness Neptime, I'm awed by this -
to me it seemed two opposite perspectives where light and darkness shown!~
Intersting perspectives!
Keep penning on one stroke at a time!
Bill
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Well I think you did a good job. The last line really got me thinking. There are so many ways to interpret that, alone. all in all, the poem was amazing. I think you did an excellent job.
Keep writing amazing poetry.
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You have me mesmerized again! This is great...
Diggin' it majorly!
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Brilliant!!
I loved this piece and it's truly inspiring!!!
Hope you have a wonderful CHRISTmas season!!!
I L-O,L-O,L-O, L-OVE!! This piece!!
Keep up the good work!!'
-Annie In The Shadows♥
(PS"God bless us, EVERYONE!"-Tiny Tim)
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