As stolen shadows reappear,
je retourne dans vos heures magiques.
Now with you near, hopes persevere,
your feelings evade my mystique.
Je retourne dans vos heures magiques,
with svelte-smooth scenery to greet
new groves of greenery unique,
and untold moments- meadowsweet.
Now with you near, hopes persevere,
truth’s shelter shows our tender times,
life’s solid-soldier chandelier
shines calm, contented paradigms.
Your feelings evade my mystique,
as pigeon’s coo in nesting place,
like solaced lovers’ whispers speak,
with happy hearts in each embrace.
Author notes
Art: R S Adams Jr
Je retourne dans vos heures magiques ('s' in 'magiques' is not pronounced): French for : I return in your magic hours.
To me, the 'green' prompt is 'newness and innocence,' which grow in the greenery of magic moments.
The form is new to me and inspired my title and my theme. The sunlight steals the shadows away, but they do return; as I have.
A contest entry
- NO GREENS - ROUND 2 - Invitation Only by Pamela A Lamppa.
3000 points, ended January 20, 2008, 17 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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A beautiful homage to Spring and all things fresh and green, meadows and new love.
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well done, calm and refreshing, beautiful green meadow greetings, magic hours indeed. I love the image as well.
well done
ken
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crystaldust 30-12-07 11:47
I enjoyed reading this so much; it is just beautiful in form, words, thought - well, just everything really. Love the picture, too. I wish you all the luck in the world in the contest.
Joy
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thank you, crystal
I am glad you were so pleased with Je Retourne. It was difficult to write this new form, but interesting.
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Beautiful phrasing & such exquisite writing.
You took a dwelling side with prompt and ran with it flowingly. Loved it.
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Superb!
An excellent retourne filled with GREEN and lots of wonderful simile.
You have penned the type of verse we are looking for. Thoroughly enjoyable and I love the French. Your title is excellent. Well done Poet! Very very well done. ~Pamela
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thank you for the bronze...
I am honoured. There were hours of work there for me to manage to keep anywhere near the brilliance of these poets you have found. Congratulations on a great contest and a difficult decision made. -
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RS Adams Jr.
It is such a beautiful Retourne and worthy of your trophy and much much more. You did a terrific job with it. Thank you.
~Pamela
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thank you ,Pamela
I am humbled your comments. I do not envy you the job of judging this contest because it has so many beautiful poems in it. The challenge makes me try all the harder. And, that's what we are here for. Thank you for that opportunity.
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This is overflowing with nuances of innocence & new-found meaning. Very expressive in a soft flow.
I'm impressed as you say you are new to the form.
Blue
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BREATH TAKING
Flows like a sweet red wine across the tongue and leaves an inner peace upon the mind...sighs...I do love the french language A winner for sure
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Outstanding poem! Meaning and metre flows together in an intricate melody--good luck in the contest!
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