in damascene night-
the stirring wolves ring the moon
like a silver bell
Author notes
not a daydream but dreamy, I hope...I also hope that Shakespeare dosn't hate haiku!
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A contest entry
- Shakespeare hates your emo poems by katie-jo.
1000 points, ended December 28, 2007, 13 entries
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very rich
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Well, yes more dreamy especially with "damascene" used. I like this Haiku. A little different from what I have seen. I wonder did Shakespeare even dable in Haiku?
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Sounds like a night one should not be abroad,but I like the scene and the tinkle of the bells, Couldn't find damascene in my little Macquarie durn it. A mention of the meaning in notes would have helped
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ronnica- damascene is a blackish-blue iron made in Spain and used particularly in the production of arms and armour. What is particular about items forged from this exotic deep blue metal is that the craftsmen embellish them with inlays of silver or gold. That is what made damascene seem to me to be an excellent metaphor for the night sky embellished with its stars and silver moon.
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Very visual haiku you have penned here - liked the verbiage and the traditional form. Lots of luck - nice write.
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very nice
unusual and a very nice write . . like "ring the moon" and "like a silver bell" . . great word choices !
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Way to go dogfish! Just a nice haiku that I hope Shakespeare would appreciate. THANKS again!!
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I like this. I had to look up damascene, but it was worth it. Thanks for teaching me a new word. This is a lovely piece, and I really love haiku. Well written.
Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest.
Merry Christmas!
~katiebird -
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Thanks for your thoughts, "katiebird"; part of the reason to write this poem was just to use that word. It's new to me,too,and I just think it's great!
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