slammed
like book on desk;
for i am novel,
without words,
in endless chapter
A contest entry
- Falling by Naridill.
300 points, ended December 26, 2007, 14 entries
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This is pretty damned good, I would Capitalize the "I" though, it is just proper English.
and, it would seem to add the impression of a little arrogance to the piece, sort of a statement of "demand of recognition" in lieu of the subject matter, but hey what the hell do I know, I'm just a drunken Farm Animal.
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haha you're pretty cool.
thanks!
and about the "i" --you know, sometimes i just either use all proper punctuation or not. in this case, i liked how it look with lower case 'i'.
i know what you mean about the "i" though. :]
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I really like this. Metaphoric fiat! Volumes without self indulgence.
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Thanks. :]
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clever and crafted beautifully. The start seems very awkward but a beautiful metaphor and very well casted imagery.
Thanks for entering.
Much luck.
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you and i both.
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This is so clever. You are a genius. Awesome write, man. btw, Where did the sunflowers go?
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i ate them.
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I could hear this vividly~ smart, and tight writing.
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