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Split Screen Analogy

Missing image

 

stitching seams

to second skin inside split screen visions

curves like architecture    coming undone

where visions expand to softer places

inside a sky of insomnia

                        a fine line of calm   [mayhem]

 

inserting my mistakes beside you

with back bone analogy   scripted from a dream

a parenthesis of friendship anxiously watching

burning behind religion

                         as laughter peels back a smile

 

the clouds made confessions to me as morning opened

      aching inside poetic words

whispering “let me breathe your beauty”

as they slowly drown in a caress of daylight

the sky meets color from the rising sun

 

you could say

I live in your curves   - move with your lines

like a song in my head fumbling with consciousness

conducted chords folded into tears mixed with memories

trying to describe you as I digest dimensions

                                           an extra piece of thought   -chewed on

 

bent on blue as steam rises with white noises

       forever falling like Autumn leaves

flooding senses behind drawn curtains of Act I

the shape of your love consumes me     unleashed like fury

burning me from the inside out

in the space between

 

                    unheard whispers 

 

                                  and conceptions of love ~

 

 

 

 

 

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  • And Hyetal
    February 3, 2008

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    I think this is a great take on the picture prompt! This was so emotional, I love it! My favorite lines:

    "you could say

    I live in your curves - move with your lines"

    Great, and congrats on a well-earned HM!

    ~Cassie


  • maralisa silver member
    February 3, 2008
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    a great write i like theline unheard whispers and conceptions of love


  • Hetha gold member
    February 3, 2008
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    Just amazing! Congrats on your HM!


  • stavykm gold member
    February 3, 2008

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    Interesting Write

    This was a different picture. I liked the way you wrote with the picture in mind. I liked it! Thank you for sharing with me. You are an increadible poet.
    Many Blessings
    Kelle Marie
    stavykm


  • Patched Up Ragdoll
    February 3, 2008

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    the graphic is really interesting and fits the write really well. I think the poem went well with the prompt too.

  • piccola silver member
    February 2, 2008

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    Very nice. this is filled with vivid imagery and takes the reader on a wonderful ride. Thank you very much for sharing with the group. I wish I could write complex thoughts like this. I wish I had complex thoughts.


  • grannyeri gold member
    February 2, 2008
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    Commented on this before you entered it into this reading list. Nice HM for this write.

  • Susan E. Pennycuff
    January 28, 2008
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    holy smokes this was one well written piece of poetry, yikes even, makes me think my poem doesn't even deserve to be on the same reading list as this one .. lol ( we're talking grade school and college level entries here .. lol gonna be a long time before I graduate lmbo) for the record those three little yellow clappy guys are on their feet hun!

  • grannyeri gold member
    January 15, 2008

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    Wonderful take on this picture - very creative in form and style and use of space; liked the font used too. Exquisite words used here to explain this relationship. Liked the flow and the subtle sensuality in these lines. Can see why you thought this was your best prewrite.


  • Cupcrazy gold member
    January 3, 2008
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    Deep and captivating, I loved it Hugs, Bunny


  • Cat gold member
    December 23, 2007

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    ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhh... you're experimenting! i like this side of you..

    very nice- very very nice

    m

  • Rowan gold member
    December 22, 2007

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    holy crap, hon~ this is breathtakingly brilliant.
    Standing and applauding, once again!
    wow.


  • SummerlandRayne gold member
    December 22, 2007

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    This is just so amazing! I am completely enthralled by the depth of this write and your perception of this pic. I will read this a few more times to make sure I have absorbed it all. Thank you for this wonderful entry!!!

    Blessed Be~
    Az

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