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A smokey sidewalk tune

Where are you now?
Dark eyes prying,
Vying,
Preying upon blue marbles,
You cheated to win...

Why should I?
I showed him thirty eight reasons,
The father of six children,
All of peace's get,

He has fast hands.

The feel of cement upon the cheek,
Let the fist play a gentle melody upon my chin,
Spite was my reasoning,
And he wouldn't let me in...

Facedown on the sidewalk,
Cigarette smoke leaking out of the half open door.
I should have said no,
But I like gentle melodies...


Shadows upon my face,

I disown a child,

He drops and I walk,

Peace lays in my hand...

 

Lies lay in wait,

Living to break bread and drink my blood,

A cup of dark,

The shark was the bait,

She drinks with them...

 

I should have known.

 

Five kids for eight liars,

I don't have time to watch my life,

Heartbeats count the time I have to wait,

Dark eyes staring,

I should have seen your "what's yours is mine..."

 

Trust is fickle.

It wasn't the money,
It wasn't the show,
It was the look in those dark eyes...

...and the fact that she cheated to win.

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Demington

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  • Luminescence
    March 17, 2008
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    Shancy was your judge for the contest… Because of the abundance of entries... we are having trouble getting two scores for each poem...I would just like to thank you anyway for entering and participating in our contest and good luck,
    ~luminescence


  • Shancy Fayre
    March 17, 2008

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    This one is deep and dark. My comments must be short due to the volume of entries. Thank you so much for entering. Good luck. Your score is: Title:10 Diction:7 Syntax:8 Wowness factor:8 Total:33. Shancy.


  • AkitoTae
    February 9, 2008

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    WOW, this is a strong poem, It really gets into your mind, or it did in mine. Well it's... different... in a good way! I really don't know what to say It's just really good!


  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    December 25, 2007

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    Welcome to AllPoetry

    This is a strong, heartfelt write.
    Interesting.

    Best of luck in the contest
    Enjoy AllPoetry
    Stay safe
    ~Manda