You were
figment
black night’s imagination
star pinned
on dark shroud
after open-mouthed smile
that swallowed
my words
like gaping
black hole
sucks
at wishing stars
so Joy sputtering to an end
in sudden wary resemblance
to fear
Closing one eye at a time
I am midnight
waiting for dawn
second comings
that are not as promising
as when I had more faith
such things hover
at the edge of reality
waiting
for my weak
moment
when I reel in
loose strings
one strand
at
a
time
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A contest entry
- Just write for you by zochit2me.
800 points, ended January 3, 2008, 16 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This is even more beautiful the second time around. So serene and comfortable, allowing the reader to melt into the words. The flow is excellent and never broken. I love the way you ended it and those last two stanzas were like WOW!!!!
such things hover
at the edge of reality
waiting
for my weak
moment
when I reel in
loose strings
one strand
at
a
time
Becky
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ty so much...when I delve into my soul to draw out such a poem as this, I am always shaken. It is a favorite of mine, to be sure. ty so much for the gold.
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nice write...very creative...keep up the good work!
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ty so much for your comment.
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Beautiful words for the end of love. Carol, congratulations on the deserving trophy. You are so magical.
michael
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and youa re magical to me my friend.
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"I am midnight
waiting for dawn
second comings
that are not as promising
as when I had more faith"
Sighhh...It was so much easier to have more faith before the inevitable losses any life must seemingly bear, my Friend. Innocence affords us that. No matter the trials you've borne, I could never see you as being weak, ever. Good luck in Becky's contest, Sweetie. 
Wanda
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I work very ahrd at NOT being weak, but then, it is at my weakest that I find my greatest strength and courage. and ty for your dear comments.
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