Cross by Xx Luna xX at All poetry

Holy Cross,

father's loss.

Savior died,
mother cried.

Bloody tear, You gave to me,

gave Your life to set me free,
opened my eyes so I can see..

Holy Cross,

Fiery gloss.

Holes in hand.
Blood on sand.

The sun cried.

Savior died.

Now we live!

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Jpoteet
February 12, 2008
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I really like this poem, just the way it is set up is fantastic!
C.o.g.
February 1, 2008

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I apsoutley loved your poem. I garentee you, you'll have a spot on the finalist list. Very beautiful and awsome written piece you have there. I can't explain in words how much I love this poem. God bless!
- Xx Luna xX
  February 1, 2008
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  Wow
  Thank you so much!!
Stars of Hope
January 28, 2008

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Wow! Absoulutely stunning! I loved the line "Fiery gloss" It's different and really adds to the overall tone and mood of the piece! Great Job! God bless!

Luv ya oodles!
Courtney
O.o
January 9, 2008

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WOW!! This is so deep A little more punctuation, but great job, this is really special
SpydurPoet
December 29, 2007

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Wow. You did an excellent job with the form and rhyme here. The flow was near perfect.
Write on!
~*~SP~*~
RisingTideofChrist
December 26, 2007

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This really touched me and I really liked the format you used. Very powerful.
In Christ,
Jibbergabber
ears2hearyou
December 23, 2007

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Very very clever....
I really enjoyed your format...I would have used..bloody
tears..you gave to me, just to give it a touch more
impact than tree as it seemed you bended the message to
fit the structure. Remember there was an eclipse when
the son of god died, I would have used.."The sun cried."
instead of no one cried, and because there was a lot
of weeping on the day he died.
I usually don't critique this deep, however I did this
time, because I really enjoyed the format you presented.
very effectively captured our attention.
Excellent job....
ears2hearyou
Kathleen : ))
- Xx Luna xX
  December 24, 2007
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  Thank you!!
  Thank you so much for your advice. I have been working on this poem for a while now... You have given me great advice and for that I thank you with all my heart...
VanGoghNights
December 23, 2007

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Interesting write you have here.... I love acrostics I enjoyed reading this..very nice
Savina