I didn't plan this
Why'd it happen
I feel in love
And I can't have him
He's the perfect guy
Like no one I've known
The feelings he gives me
When he holds me close
I've fallen in love
With the worst possible person
For being in love with him
Can cost me a friend
I'm accidently in love
With this amazing guy
But I can't have him
So what do I do?
Him and me would be perfect
We've both been hurt
One to many times
This half moon just haunts us though
I'm accidentally in love
With my best friends ex
So now I must choose
Love or friendship
Kisses or hugs
Long nights or fun-filled days
I'm accidently in love
And now I don't know what to do
Author notes
I know.... a little long... I tried using the half moon as a metaphor of sorts but I don't know how well that went..... hope you enjoy
Alex
A contest entry
- An Abundance of Titles by Mad As Rabbits.
700 points, ended December 30, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Very fitting with the title, I like it. It's a bit lacking though. It was more told than showed. Like "I am falling in love with the worst possible person". The emotions do get across, but I don't feel them, it just really let's me know that you can't love him but that's it. It's just missing a little something.
I do admit, the half moon thing was a bit confusing. Perhaps if you elaborated or used it more, then it's be less confusing.
Overall, good job, but it needs a little work.
Thanks for entering.
Love Always,
Caroline
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Is this really true or was it written strictly for the contest? If it's true then who is it about??? I wanna know! Lol. Well, I like the poem. It's really sad and emotional. But it's great. Great job!!!
Megan -
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its really true. i didnt read any of the titles past this one. lol i knew it would fit perfectly. not sure how well i did on it. but yea... oh and im not telling you who it is. muhahahaha
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