I erased all
the poems you
presented to me
so I would not
look back upon them
convincing myself again
that the words
meant more than
what they said
and between the lines
existed something more
than just
empty spaces.
A contest entry
- GIVE ME YOUR BEST!!! ya know ya wanna! by infinitechaos07.
450 points, ended January 10, 2008, 41 entries
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I have decided that this is not what I'm looking for in the contest and it will be removed. Thank you for entering anyway.
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I like that you said exactly what you wanted to say. A lot of short poems skirt around their topics and the idea is never fulfilled because such brevity sometimes doesn't allow. But the message was definitely clear here. I think this could use something else, I'm just not sure what that is yet. If I think of it, I'll come back.
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This is quite good for being a little short, You're point is clear and I like the format. I've had those feelings before myself... too bad you can't erase them from your memory as well, or at least that is how I felt lol. Very well written. Thanks for entering my contest and best of luck!
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