bees and seeds and because in between
with spoon buzzing as bug
working to feed a mother
from squash in its soft goo
like nectar for what's coming
to repeat it as honey
with arm of tender hunger
how much rainbow can we diminish
by not looking out window
so seeing each species is there
as petals to point to
empowerered to be perrenial a few
but none just with paring knife
rather the lily yard
and its global to ponder
with brightness more than set
have you seen insects dotting
as polka on a flower
mellifluous made mellow
and wonder the caution cone of conditions
for lion and all
Author notes
may edit, but I had more wonderful fun than a rough draft
good luck isn't sure footed
please don't give me cards of emoticons or the applause but your words
A contest entry
- What Do You See Now ? (Round 4) by just mercedes.
700 points, ended January 5, 2008, 12 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
enraptured for more than paper
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annonymous isn't, some times we give ourselves away, just by being. you gave yourself up to this and saw so much, with beautiful words, thank you for this entry. /as petals to point to/ means most to me, but the final stanza is
most powerful. There is much richness in communication gestated by art, whether images pictorial or sororial. -
have you seen insects dotting
as polka on a flower
mellifluous made mellow
and wonder the caution cone of conditions
for lion and all
I love the imaggery and the take on a very intimate
place of the muse bringing a kind of universal flow here and there..well done...
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I need to be more innovative with author notes sometimes
PrabhuDayal Khattar I like your name in caps but how you can be down to earth without one
thanks for finding delight in my scan through the senses. And heartbeatedly you perceptibly said how I wrote it to "take on a very intimate place" yet I look in the mirror of who submitted this not any other muse per se doing the thinking. although there is greater instigation signaled or more listened to for good influence even.
enjoyed your advocacy of this,
also called
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