today i learned the truth
some made me cry tears of joy
others made me want to cry out for love
you told me how you felt
how you loved me dear
and how from the moment you found out about me
you would not take me away from the world
for 16 years your heart has been breaking is what you had said
how it was hard for you let let me go
you truly love me
and i love you back
i love you mother
i learned the truth about you
how now you have your own family
how you left once you found out about me
and never tried to look for me
i have never seen you
do i look at all like you?
do i have your eyes?
i love you father
but unlike you
my mother who had told me the truth about both her and you
you are not there
i learned that she loves me
and that she was scared
i learned how much i am like her
and the things we have shared
we both had hard times
and now mother you are here
once again talking to me
making me feel loved
today i learned the truth
Author notes
when i was a baby i was adopted . my mother was 17 when she had me. my father left when he found out she was pregnant. I find there are many sides to it . an upside and a downside .
A contest entry
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Comments
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Unfortunatly however wonderful your poem was... I wanted the poems to be less that forty words... I really wished that you would have read my qualifications before you entered.
Thank you for entering but I'm sorry because of the lenght your poem does not qualify to win.
~lumin -
I honestly could not get into this. I especially didn't like this line:
"others made me want to cut"
I mean overall this really didn't even feel like a poem.. more like random thoughts jotted down in a journal. I'm sorry this just... didn't impress me at all. And while I understand there is more expression of personal feelings in this, you DID enter it in my contest. I just think it needs more imagery... more passion. There is nothing that really makes it poetry to me.
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This definitely shows how the upside and the downside are there, and what they are, but that they aren't always as significant and blunt, and sometimes they are horribly so. You have let out all your emotions, and while some of this is tragic, there is a light at the end of the tunnel.
Wonderful poem.
Thank you for entering and all the best in the contest.
Happy New Year!
~kate-flamingo -
I think this poem shows both the upside and the downside in ways that don't always stand out. You have spoken with your heart and let everything out! Keep the ink flowing and good luck!
~Donna~
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