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Spiritual Breathing

 

Impressionable shadows, led by a flare, 

 

 the revenant dance in darkness of a stare.

 

Bellowing words from a familiar song,

 

  desperately searching for a path leading on.

 

Seduced by warmth and white of the light,

 

aimlessly wandering, on through the night.

 

Kissing ambitous souls of the dreaming,

 

  finally aware of life's reverance and meaning.

 

Looming the room of a mother's child at birth,

 

  harmonious spirits breath for a newborn earth.  

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Prompt: when ghosts sing

In a list

A contest entry

What did you think

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  • Antebellum
    June 25
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    thanks for entering.

    I really like the rhyme.

    good luck.


  • Heva Feva
    June 14
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    That's amazing! Good luck and thanks for entering my contest.
    -heva


  • ListentotheSilence
    January 11, 2008
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    WOW
    *is struck speechless*


  • ListentotheSilence
    January 11, 2008
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    WOW
    *is struck speechless*


  • Arizona Sunset
    January 6, 2008

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    You so earned this beautiful gold! I look often at paths and don't always see...~blessings always~ Trisha


  • Stickboy gold member
    January 6, 2008
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    congrats on the Gold it was well deserved Bro, thanks for sharing this


  • tarcus
    January 1, 2008
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    i have to be honest and say the second last line spoilt it for me


  • Breezie
    January 1, 2008
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    This is very good. I love the imagery. =D


  • Roaddog Wolf
    December 30, 2007

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    really good write

    really liked these two lines, "Bellowing words from a familiar song, desperately searching for a path leading on.", like the open door that we look to have reason in things we hear in songs but are inspired in our own version of what we look for but don't really see. and leads into the wandering dreams and meaning and the breath of lifes spirit. very thought provoking and full of meaning.

    This was an excellent write, very deserving of the Gold. I like this one allot. thanks for sharing.


  • Titus gold member
    December 30, 2007

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    This is probably based on hope than actual. And from this conclusion of mine, I am observating it was a break up of a relationship, that all the plans went out of the window! That is the feel, and there is always a penalty for predicting what was in the poets mind.


    • Angel w o Wings
      December 30, 2007
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      Well, my friend, I wouldn't go as far as saying there are penalties for predicting, that's the whole joy of reading poetry I do believe. I feel safe saying that, cause I know the feelings that come to me when reading good poetry, maybe something totally different of what the writer intended, and that, my friend is the magic of words. It's what we intend to find for ourselves that draw us in, hands reach out of those words and hold us by both cheeks until that last word. What we see in our own live's that bring us to the point of our view.
      As for the poem, you are absolutely correct in your observation, my fine poet friend. Thank you for seeing that. It's all the more amusing.


  • Beating gold member
    December 29, 2007

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    Wow! I love this piece, it's so amazing. With the rhyming and the rythm, it was just flawless. I totally understand why you won the gold trophy! I'm bookmarking this!


  • silver-X-lining gold member
    December 23, 2007

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    I absolutely love this piece--you pen your emotions flawlessly. Wonderful flow, and absolutely beautiful word usage. Your words resound with feeling and a sense of the unknown. I love what you did with the given prompt.

    "Seduced by warmth and white of the light,
    aimlessly wandering, on through the night." Beautiful and powerful.

    Nicely written, good luck in thecontest...
    ~QoA


  • Simply Simple
    December 23, 2007

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    Interesting. I liked the way you wrote it. It kept me interested. Great job. ^.^ I also thought the picture fit very well.


  • Life is a Beach gold member
    December 23, 2007

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    This is hauntingly beautiful. Keep writing poet! As a side note...I don't think ambitionous is a word. I had not heard it before and looked it up on word web and it is not there. ***Pam***


  • TwiztidMaggot
    December 23, 2007

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    This is really good. I like how you wrote it. best of luck in the contest!!! keep up your amazing work!

    Crimson


  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    December 23, 2007
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    Thanks for the link Dear this is amazing and very powerful.


  • MissStranger
    December 23, 2007

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    hmmm...this was truly amazing!both picture and poem go hand in hand!very thoughtful word-combinations!loved the atmosphere!well done indeed!keep it up and good luck in the contest!


  • Rheea gold member
    December 23, 2007

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    your close to my heart with this, We so need a earth made new. I think it is perfect. I do not care for the special effects because they take away from the elegance and beauty of the poem . It stands alone very well.Thank you for sharing it with me.


  • Whoochi gold member
    December 22, 2007

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    This was sooo moving, definitely spiritual and profound..felt this and stirred me..this got me..."Kissing abbitionous souls of the dreaming,



    finally aware of life's reverance and meaning"
    best of luck!


  • Sedasia
    December 22, 2007
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    Applause.

    This is ghostly, hauntingly written.

    I love your style.

  • ashjoe76
    December 22, 2007

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    "kissing souls of the deep and the dreaming,
    finally aware of lifes' truth and meaning"

    A wonderful write. I love the philosophical depth here. Congrats!

  • mmook
    December 22, 2007
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    love the picture and words are well express... thanks for sharing


  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    December 22, 2007

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    Wow. This is just stunning; I love the unusual picture and gorgeous flow of words

    Best of luck in the contest
    Stay safe
    ~Manda

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