baked in the sun of life
i travelled -
the road,
less travelled by
away from thoughts
away from verse
but I was lucky enough
for the road was circular
-Neha
22nd dec, 07
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The universe is full of circles and cycles, and it's an interesting thing to comment on I think. This, could we say, limerick, approaches this though in a light-hearted way quite well.
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This made me laugh...I love it...simply amazing -
Excellent...
This poem really touched me as I have been writing on and off for many years. I had never though of it in this way! For me the circle is neverending, sometimes I write, sometimes I don't, but when I come back, I always wonder why I went away...
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Hi Neha - I loved your poem. Like the preceding comment, I thought that the comma was unneeded and a dash could go after "by" clarifying the description of your travel. I'm glad the road was circular - I wouldn't have wanted to miss this.
Ken -
Circular
Hello there, Neha.
I liked your take on the Frost poem and having the road away from poetry ultimately ending up in the same place. Sometimes we just can't get away from poetry, no matter how much we try.
I'm not sure you need that comma at the end of the third line.
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I really enjoyed this poem. Especially the last line, that was great. It's a very simplistic poem but it's very uplifting and contains a lot. I also like the references to Robert Frost's poem. The first line is really neat.
I think the line "away from thoughts" is slightly odd, because I personally believe you can't ever stop having thoughts.
Awesome poem!
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