Angels surround me
protecting me from you
from hurting myself
as well as someone new
they watch me as i sleep
they watch what i do
but most of all
they protect me from you
Author notes
i chose this because i was repeatedly raped by different people one being my grandmothers bf when i waas two tho other was my cousinfrom the age of 9-12 but jesus always had angels thee to protect me.from further hurt thats why i chose this...
where did i mess up
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well said down to the last line
angels everywhere
protect you see
they love and give
a gift to you and me
Hugs Angel♥
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This is really good! Good job expressing yours feelings!
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This is a wonderful write angels are many places and seen through many faces and strive to make you happy and out of harms way good job.
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yeah i like this one...its quite siick x
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I love the ryhme. <3 This is excellent work on your part, it's catchy as well. I love every single part, expecially the first two lines. Keep on writing!
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wow protection is what we always need so I love your poetry I read alot but decided to comment on this one I know that people need protection from others.
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Good write. Could be a little longer but it said what you wanted it to say and that's what counts.
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wow, so sad. for someone to go through this at a very young age is unimaginable. great write. take care of yourself always
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Oh wow. Your author's notes are so sad. I am sorry you had to go through this. It's good though that you can write about it and get it out in the open.
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your notes is heart breaking and tears jerking
your write needs loads of revision.. i like the concept of the angels.
i find it very short.. thanks to your notes i was able to understand and relate to some extend..
you didn't use guarding even once in your write besides your title.. i feel the word guarding has more stronger effect than the word protecting and using guarding in your write will represent your title more smoothly... guarding and protecting are synonyms but they are not exactly the same thing.. you protect something or someone form harm or any danger and you guard something or someone form things or people who could be a danger.
eg an anti virus GUARDS your pc form foreign virus from attacking and PROTECTS from crashing or when its in attack
overall i like your write
you dint mess up here u just dint gave enough time to this write.. i hope i dint confuse you and also that you finish this poem.
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the flow was brilliant, the title said it all and your words had such depth to them, the idea of your angels was beautiful
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Good!
In your honesty I now have come to understand your piece. That took bravery to write and even more courage to put in those author notes. Writing helps with the healing process and I hope that this one did its job for you. I am so sorry that this happened to you and may those Guardian Angels continue to protect you. May those that can most help you in your recovery and growth be there for you. -
well I think nothing is wrong and it's a great poem good job
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Ohhh this is spooky and very touching. nice work
pixie -
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thanks
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what did i do wrong
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