heh here we are
I hug you while gently rubbing you back
just enjoying the warmth radiating off of you
even though you say you are cold
as we talk my mind fills with memories of the past
I remember being depressed I hated it
then you burst into my heart
and your beauty destroyed every one of those feelings of hate,desperation,
lies, and pain
I cannot thank you enough I can see now
you have cleared a path for me it is as if you have freed me
freed me from this pain and sorrow the only two things I used to know
freed from a curse set upon me by roaming wild emotions
now as I sit here listening to home and
hating every minute of her suffering wishing
I could take her pain from her
I am not lost anymore adrift at sea but wishing
I could be with her the only one I care so much
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i like this. its a very good write. keep up the good work hun
have a nice Holiday.
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its very strong.
"I remember being depressed I hated it
then you burst into my heart"
these lines stand out for me, cos they are how i sometimes feel...when im depressed i always wish for someone to love and comfort..you are so lucky you have someone!!
x
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wao!this was truly amazing from the title(very original and intriguing) till the very end!you've got some very thoughtful word-combinations in here!well done indeed!keep it up!
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"freed from a curse set upon me by roaming wild emotions"
Gold.
You write with great emotion and courage. Switching in the final stanza from your own feelings to concern for her made the poem more touching, as compassion for others always will. Nice work.
Mark
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I loves you...
"remember being depressed I hated it
then you burst into my heart
and your beauty destroyed every one of those feelings..."
haha...:] you make me smile...
I remember the first time I read this I started to blush. haha...and well, as stated in my xmas gift to you, made me cry...
muchmuchverymuchlove,
-Jenn
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