I am gonna stare deep into your eyes.
Looking for love, but only finding lies.
Hopefully one day it'll be love I find
Hopefully one day mine won't be so blind.
Cause one day I know I'm gonna grow old.
And one day to you I want my heart sold.
Cause when we touch, to me it has been proved.
Something still remains, still left unremoved.
But wishing for more I begin to pray.
For those three little words you always used to say.
Instead you push me back, time and time again,
Just say if you will love me, just tell me when.
Staring out the window, I can see the rain.
Only your reflection keeping me sane.
Cause one day I know I will see your smile.
That one day I know won't come for awhile.
Author notes
5) Loving someone who doesnt love you back.
A contest entry
- Everything! by BeautifullyBroken42.
370 points, ended January 6, 2008, 6 entries
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Comments
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i really like the imagery of emotion in this poem, great job! I like the linke 'staring out the window i can see the rain
only your reflection keeping me sane
the whole rhyme scheme fits excellentely (is that a word?) I like it a lot -
aww ur so emo...o...i love this babe
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lol thxs
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yea.its hurts to love someone,but they do love u.
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tell me about it lol
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Beautiful, your words had perfect harminy...
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wow, ur a great writer, the emotion portrayed by your words is so deep
Cause one day I know I will see your smile.
That one day I know won't come for awhile.
the rhyming couplet at the end tyes in perfectly (l) it.
i hate when love is unrequited....tis surky, tres surky in fact
anyways
plz write more stuff like this
TheComaKid_X
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WOW!
Ths touched me deeply! i only wish to be as good a writer as you some day! wow... words cannot explain how wonderful it is to read such a well written poem... keep up the wonderful writing!
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thxs very much
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I really loved this piece!!!! it really did show how that even when you love someone it might not be the same for them great job!!!!
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thxs for reading
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This was beautiful . . . . it really sucks when love isnt recorpicated with love
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yea sure is. thxs for the comment
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This is really good and dont worry everybody finds love sometime
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ummhm thxs for comment
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Wow this is really good && loving some one who don't love you back is hard but there will be some one in time to take thier place && give you the love you need and want.Nice poem for real i can feel the heartache reading i
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yea this was a long time ago. thxs for reading
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no prob i'm juss gettin use to this stuff so it'll take me a while
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nps welcome 2 ap
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o..m..g.... that is really emotional! i can sooo relate to that you have a passion in you that will let you go a ral long way.. is this poem a real life experience? if it is im sorry for the pain you were put through i hope that you dont wait for this person forever... you deserve much much better.... other than that nothing was really wrong with this
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ty for your comment and yea i guess it was kinda a life experience
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thanks for the comment
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yw and thxs for yours
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**hi**
"But wishing for more I begin to pray.
For those three little words you always used to say.
Instaed you push me back, time and time again,
Just say if you will love me, just tell me when."
Lovely write my dear, I like the way you've managed to word this well and make it rhyme....it's beautiful.
keep up the great work!
Vampiress Alysia
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thxs for your comment
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this poem is awesome, its really amazing..
xxxx
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thxs for reading
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Great poem. It's sad, but I love it. The first 4 liines are my favorite.
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thxs again lol
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Great poem. It's sad, but I love it. The first 4 liines are my favorite.
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thxs for reading
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i love it
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thxs
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superdeeduper! lmao
i reeeally like this. very beautiful.. flows nicely.. i like the last two lines the most, i think.. well done. keep it up!
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ty
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truly beautfiul.
this poem is so beautiful and dear.
i absolutely love this!
so sweet.. and i have felt these same feelings.
keep it up
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thank u for reading
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no prob dear;]
.♥.
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i can really relate to this poem...i know how you feel...when i was reading this poem this one guy was just in my head the whole time...i couldnt stop thinking about him...this is a really good poem...keep writing.
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thxs for reading
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Hi this was great, Im new on AP..and ive been browsing and this has been one of the most interesting poems Ive read so far!!!
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thank you
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i kno how this feels its sad and broken bt i love it keep up the gud work
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thxs
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oh wow
ive been reading ur poems and ur a really great writer...i love the rhyming...and the style
great job
im gonna add you as a fave, cuz ur just too good
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thxs for your comment and the add.
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This is really nice.
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thxs for your comment.
I've been writing since September 29, 2007
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omg i love it every word of it its amazing its not comical or funny like i expected but it different side of you like mysterious and broken i love it [[ dont get me wrong i like ur funny side to lol ]]
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ty
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so true...<3 luv it
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thxs
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this is very sad, I hope you find that she loves you again one day. Sometimes people need a break from one another. I liked the rhyme and the fact that there were no cliches, in a peice like this it would be easy to rely on well-worn phrases. Real nice.
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thxs for your comment
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I love this poem,
I am gonna stare deep into your eyes.
Looking for love, but only finding lies.
That was brilliant
And the last two
Cause one day I know I will see your smile.
That one day I know won't come for awhile.
A writter should start and end well! You did!
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ty glad u liked it
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Sweet
you never cease to write a nice poem...none of them are boring...they all have flavour..all have a kick to them....good poem this one keep writing...you don't screw up in poems!
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Wow, this is amazing. It really expresses and has alot of meaning behind this piece. Fantastic job!
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thxs
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i like the poem...i like the fact that ur going threw all that and stuff yet you still have this: "only your reflection keeping me sane"...how you can still love that person...nice job girl scout =P
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lol ty
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well written!!
--hope u find what you're looking for
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me 2
lol
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awww
well you will always find love on ap
rogue
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thxs for reading
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i love this and i'm not only saying it i mean it... Actually made me think about "him" ( u know who i mean )
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thxs for your comment
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heres ur applause cuz i forgot it
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u blonde lol jk
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haha ur the real blonde u kno it
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wat have i told u about smoking weed. i thought u gave it up tut tut for shame
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o hellz no i told u never to bring that up in public again!! lmao jk
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yea joke thats it wink wink
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dave its beautiful
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good
aww sad, this reminds me of how i used to feel about my ex.
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thxs for reading
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this was great. It flows so nicely, and rhymes perfectly. you did a wonderful job! I absolutely loved it.
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glad u liked it. thxs for the comment
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This is very good!!!! You did a wonderful job writing this!!!! keep up you rgreat work David!!! I love it!!!
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ty for reading
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So sad,
This is so sad, but so incredible.
i like this poem a lot.
good job.
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thxs for your comment
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