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To have many things, to acquire, to possess
is, in this life, truly difficult unless
one has been born with a silver spoon,
or written and sung an irresistible tune.
There's the average stuff too, of the average man,
the plasma TV's and the minivan -
the latest cell phone behind door number three!
Congratulations sir! Buy one get one free!
Though to some it is thrilling to some it's quite enough,
to have such possessions, to have so much stuff,
to others it's lovely and even quite adoring,
...but, in the end, it turns out to be quite boring...
For the stark naked truth is ultimately cruel,
when you discover your possessions might have made you a fool.
All five of your senses have seemingly deceived you,
creating illusions you've happiness too.
The greatest gift cannot be possessed.
The most satisfying prize - head and shoulders, tops the rest.
It's as free as a dove though it flies so much higher,
so far beyond the mere skin of desire.
Anyone can join this club of renown.
There's no membership dues, or signature written down.
Just come on in, and enter with your smile,
or if you don't have one, you can borrow mine for a while.
When divided it spreads and multiplies ten fold,
Like loaves and fishes, a theme that's never old.
It's not measured in pounds, mere inches, or dollars,
though often in kisses, hugs and straightened collars.
Freely it must be given, in order to get;
must be released without slightest regret.
Then if in due time, one has made one's heart true,
this free flying dove may come back to you.
Then again, and again, and again, ad infinitum
till clocks leave scant minutes and all time is done.
Your lives will shine with bright light and laughter,
You’ll walk hand in hand, to live happily ever after.
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Author notes
Option 3b: "Some people care too much, I think it's called love."
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This is so true, and so well said.
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There is so much in this that resonates with hope and care. Lovely. Love the gentle rhyme and easy rhythm in this piece. Nice work. ~Pamela 
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Thank you Pam. This is actually one of the very first poems I wrote - maybe the third one ? Perceptive of you to detect the "easy rhyme".
But I remember it was SO hard! lol I sweated over every syllable to get it right, then kept editing and editing.
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Easy as in smooth and gentle not elementary.
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A true Gold write here my friend
I think this is an exceptional write you have truly written a perfect poem of what life sould be I must say BRAVO Keep up this work and you will be so loved on this sight for so many are looking for those who lives it every day . Wow This is great
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Great message, good rhyme and flow. Thank you for your entry, and following the rules. Apologies for the earlier misunderstanding. I like the second stanza. No idea why. Your poem also makes me feel guilty... heh heh. DO NOT GET TOO INVOLVED IN MATERIALISTIC WEALTH! Must remember... best wishes in the contest! The prewrite fits great!
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Please read the rules. State option number and letter, along with the prompt, in the AN, and also your screen name. Then I will comment for real.
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So much truth in your poem..my friend..It is very sad how we become drown in materialistic things to give ourselves comfort..temporary joy..and forget the simple things where the real eternal joy comes from..
the whole poem is fantastic..words..style..everything..thank you for sharing this master piece Paul..
Ruby
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Thank you for your kind words here. This was about the third poem I ever wrote so it took a LONG time to write. But when it was finished I discovered the joy of writing.
Paul
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I like: the simple message, the simple rhyme, the undisciplined rhythm, and the way the poem is sustained without being overdone. I think you can justifiably be proud of this.
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Thank you Mairi. You have a lovely day.
Paul
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oh yes...indeed...
I remember this write Paul...
it is one of my fav's by you...
such a wonderful message of insight and very moving...
if only we could all remember these words of wisdom each day...the world would be a much better place! don't you agree?
I'm shocked to find HM's here and no GOLD...for this write is worthy of gold...
what is that saying? words of wisdom well spoken are like apples of silver in frames of gold? or something to that effect...
this write reminds me of that vibe...
stay warm colorado feller! us folks in alabama are freezing...
Blessings! Tammy
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Fantastic Greta work, great flow, great wording! Thanks for entering!
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Thank you JWM
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just being silly lol
Thank you for taking the time to enter into my contest.
I wish you the best of luck.
REDWINGSPIRIT
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OMG this is absolutely beautiful! The flow is wonderful and your message is powerful. Awesome job! Congratulations sir! buy one get one free! <<<< I love this line lol
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Thank you infinitechaos07.
So many people have a bent idea of what love is all about. it's not on the songs on the radio or what we see on TV or certainly not what is portrayed in Hollywood.
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Please enter a poem with a gold trophy that shows in a contest entry. This is nice I like the poem Death would be the greatest gift I think. I always wonder if the tales of Heaven are true. Excellent poem Paul
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oh dear...well..now I'm in tears...
this is simply beautiful...
so very beautiful...
I could weep...I love this poem...so many stellar lines! but the stunning message just melts my heart...
this is so true and profound...penned with such feeling...and skill.
You are wonderful with rhyme!
oh...truly lovely this poem is...
and stuff is simply that...stuff...nothing more...
this is a powerful read, sir!
I'm impressed Paul!
Blessings! Tammy
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Excellent
Good write...your words reveal so much...mystery
For the stark naked truth is ultimately cruel
when you discover your possessions might have made you a fool.
All five of your senses have seemingly deceived you,
creating the illusion that you have happiness too.
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Thank you mysteryLadyMary. This was, I think my third poem that I wrote so it took a while for me. Still it remains one of my favorites too. It's the first poem that taught me that if I dig deep the muse will appear.
Paul
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