We Painted Love Every Shade of Red
I hear a song sing to me, and it almost brings me to my knees,
It says “you’re not like all the rest”, no you’re not like all the rest…
When you grab my wrist and our lips collide,
You can bet yourself that you’re mine,
And I am yours, forever yours.
And if its love you are giving me,
It’s slowly becoming the air I breathe.
Don’t let me go, I won’t go home.
Love notes on torn out pages remind me of our memories,
And I have something to tell you—you’re all I need to be.
Live with me inside my heart, Give me my role, I’ll play the part.
Stay with me, you’re all I need.
When you grab my wrist and our lips collide,
You can bet yourself that youre mine,
And I am yours, forever yours.
And if its love you are giving me,
It’s slowly becoming the air I breathe.
Don’t let me go, I won’t go home.
Keep my heart within your chest, keep it safe so while we rest,
I’ll be with you, I’ll live in you.
You took my hand and held my heart; I knew it’d be from the start.
But there’s one thing I have yet to say… Bet I know you know it anyway…
When you grab my wrist and our lips collide,
You can bet yourself that youre mine,
And I am yours, forever yours.
And if its love you are giving me,
It’s slowly becoming the air I breathe.
Don’t let me go, I won’t go home.
A contest entry
- come one come all lyrics wanted!!! by diabeticboy.
1050 points, ended April 15, 2008, 30 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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this is awesome and actually sounds like it's true, am i right? lol, nice job, pictured it kind of slow with a really good flow. thanks for entering
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hehe, yeah its true
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Wow
quite a poem im not into the mushey stuff but that was rellllllyyyyyy good!!!!!!!!!!!!!! -
Hello there.
Thanks for sharing this moving poem of love and emotions and longing and desire.
I clicked on your poem because of the wonderful poetic resonance of your title. I was hoping for a poem full of metaphor and poetic devices, but I didn't get that at all. Oh well - we can't always get what we want.What you gave me were lyrics for a pop song - they sound good enough for a real song, like all lyrics do.
Take some of my best wishes,
BJ.
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this should be a song
it would be great
with music
your word choice was well picked
i liked it just as you wrote it no parts better than another
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i love this piece it sounds like my own lyrics
plz keep writing. and i wish i could forever be yours.
thnk you for entering and good luck in the contest
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You have presented us with a very nice and cleverly created piece flowing smoothly across the page here. Thank you for sharing and best wishes to you. Keep that pen handy dear poet.
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this is nice and I see a nice flow but it isn't what I was looking for. I wanted obvious rhyme. This is beautiful though and I'd like to read more. Thank you for entering.
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I understand completely but you said in you contest
The key word here is rhyme: It must rhyme ... it can be any rhyming form but it must rhyme!
and it does rhyme. I needed it to be on one page so instead of haing a traditional 4 lines stanza like most, I made it two...
example
Keep my heart within your CHEST, keep it safe so while we REST,
I’ll be with YOU, I’ll live in YOU.
You took my hand and held my HEART; I knew it’d be from the START.
But there’s one thing I have yet to SAY… Bet I know you know it ANYWAY…
so im not exactly sure what you meant.
Thank you for the critique
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Amazing
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