Drifting upon a breeze
A sigh as if it were
To crease
Effortlessly
Towards the earth
Dances for a fleet
ing moment
Such surprise
A final stroke
Gasps
A contest entry
- Z is for... by Suzanne Dia.
300 points, ended December 28, 2007, 6 entries
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Wow! Creative and interesting! I loved your word choice. I also liked the unique flow. I was inspired by this; it was awesome. Nicely done, I'm sure you'll do well in the contest, good luck.
~Pandy
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this made me smile... the kind of smile that one gives when he/she likes something. well done, good luck!
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lol thanks! I like your manner of commenting most muchly!!!!
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this is loverly, i like it..especially breaking fleet ing..as if it caught up in the air then continues it's journey, very nice
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I like how it gasps at the end
really a nice portrayal of zephyr, i think. Also the way you drew the words out in the second stanza ..clever.
Good luck, thank you for entering.
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Thank you very much! I'm glad you liked it! Good luck in judging the contest! I know they are very hard to do. So thanks for posting this contest!
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