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My Diamond

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My Diamond

A penthouse room in the finest hotel,
waiting for him in a long evening gown.
He’ll be here at eight, I know him so well,
dinner for two and a night on the town.

A man of distinction, jewel thief by trade,
tall dark and handsome with masculine hands.
I love this man but the choices I’ve made,
prison was never a part of my plans.

Precisely at eight; a knock at the door,
I let this man in that made my heart freeze.
I smiled as I watched him kneel on the floor,
he offered a box while on bended knees.

A diamond within, my favorite stone;
I’m sure it was stolen, not just a loan.

 

 

 

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Prompt: Write about my favorite stone.
Art work: Diamond, by ~OurConspiracy-x

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  • Blue Rew silver member
    January 2, 2008

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    Always an essence of mischief...
    the photo and the creative twist of doubt
    leave a shiny edge upon this verse.
    Best to you with this great take on the prompt.
    Blue


  • torn dragonfly
    December 30, 2007

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    This is beautiful, I really loved the composition, flow, rhyme, and how it was all pulled together around th diamond. It also presents a bit of a twist in the sense that it comes off so romantic but also dark and questioning. Great write!


  • Ellis gold member
    December 27, 2007
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    This is Beautiful, Wonderful

    How VERY clever. I love the music in this poem.
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  • jo-el
    December 26, 2007

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    good story. i like how you make sonnets so relevant to the current times. cool pic too.
    somethin about the way the gift was acquired adds to its symbolism. the risk involved reflects a surplus of dedication. love the flow. well done.


  • Desire gold member
    December 24, 2007

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    Wow!!

    Love this one and Magnificent piece penned in a form You are just so good at it
    Woooooooooooo Hooooooooooooooo

    Another one that grabs and tugs!!
    -can I borrow Your brain-

    Thank You for sharing Your Talent Sweet Soul!
    Best wishes to You in the contest my Friend
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • PerVirtuous
    December 23, 2007

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    I am impressed that you can tell such a complete story in sonnet form. That is not traditional, but I love it. You are expanding the form, you pioneer, you!


  • Whoochi gold member
    December 23, 2007
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    Diamonds are a girls best friend...Great job DOLLFACE!!!


  • Sacrificial Love
    December 22, 2007

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    WOW....

    the storyline laid out in this piece could be the makings of a movie...

    I LOVE IT....

    xoxo
    Heidi


  • Jimfre Talbent
    December 21, 2007

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    I have finally come to accept, wholly and fully, that structure is not a pain in the ass. You inspire me time and time again with the way you bend your words to fit the schemes. This, to me, makes you an empress among tomes.

    The poem itself had a nice unexpected flavor. Who writes about a jewel thief and the torn emotions of his lover?

    Brava!


    • Amera gold member
      December 21, 2007
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      What a nice comment! Thank you so much


  • Swan song gold member
    December 21, 2007
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    My how women love the dad guys! You write these so smoothly When I read it alowed my voice dances


  • freespirit51
    December 21, 2007

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    Well my friend you have done a beautiful job on this sonnet. I think the subject lent itself well to the form. Great work and good luck in the contest.


  • Ithica silver member
    December 21, 2007

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    I love seeing your imaginations workings! A jewel thief, my word what a life that would be! The picture is gorgeous. I thought at first, it might even be you! And everyone knows, "diamonds" are a girls best friend!


  • ellipsist
    December 21, 2007

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    I love that your poems are so often stories as well... love the aspect of fantasy woven in and the elements of humor and surprise... kind of fairy tale like, in their appeal sometimes... love the way you tell these tales...


  • BellaD
    December 21, 2007
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    Well done!

    I enjoyed it immensely. Clever!


  • JohnnyD gold member
    December 21, 2007

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    HUH? Hmmnn, I never remembered dating you in Florida, actually you were just a wee child last time I was there? hmmnnnnnn???? How odd????

    Love ya gal

    dad


  • Soulful Woman silver member
    December 21, 2007

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    This was really good.. I love the entire concept of it.
    You have done it again, my friend..
    Soulful Woman


  • Melodies
    December 21, 2007

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    Oh my!! A diamond!!

    Can we turn down a diamond? Your poem is beautifully delightful and very clever, too. Yes, give the ring back and say, "NO MORE!"


  • And Hyetal
    December 21, 2007

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    Ooh, a stolen stone? Say no, say no!

    I can feel all the emotion in this poem... It's beautiful for the love part of it, but kind of scary for the stolen diamond part. I'm a goody two shoes.

    You're definately going to do well in this contest!!!

    Always,
    Cassie


  • Laura
    December 21, 2007

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    ohh i think i'll just settle for the man lolol this is great love your talent always make me smile xxx

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