deep in natures womb
fertile seed, turned to bloom
emerged into a world of doom
withered and died, much too soon
yet death couldn't hold her in a tomb
for beauty, you see...there was no room
barren, but for a season...her life resumed
Author notes
picture prompt
A contest entry
- - Seasonal Keys - by Desire.
700 points, ended December 24, 2007, 5 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Mega-Rhymer! by albymyheart.
1600 points, ended July 17, 2008, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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All seven lines rhyming with the same sound and creating a pedestal for your picture to stand on! I like that. You have expressed nature in a loving way with deep metaphors. Interestingly I feel the rhyme sound "oom" tends to add a certain sombre feel to the piece but I like that. I read this slowly and it is a beautiful piece. Thank you so much for your entry...alby
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Thank You!!
Thank You for Your entry: But For A Season
Oh My what a Wonderful weaving of words You have shared with images to tell a story
Love the rhyme You versed~~
These words grabbed me:
withered and died, much too soon
yet death couldn't hold her in a tomb
Thank You for sharing Your Spirit also message
**Judging will be done shortly~~
Best wishes to You in the contest!
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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For everything a time and place. The changing beats in the poem counter point nicely the mono rhyme. The images of dispair prepared for a season of hope. Well done. Love, Tom B.
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thanks love, the picture was really a beautiful, inspiring piece
Blessings,
Sassy
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Well, I didn't think I liked momorhymes, but you changed my mind. This is lovely.
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thank you,
I didn't think I liked it either, but this one just seemed to fit
Happy Holidays,
Sincerely,
Sassy
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WOW!
Great metaphoric take on the picture prompt.
Superb imagination and a beautiful piece you have brought forth.
I wish you the bestin the contest!
Many blessings
Happy holidays
~david~
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thanks for the wonderful comments and applauds, this was a lovely pic, I like rhyme, but usually don't write monorhyme,
but my muse insisted
Happy Holidays
and Blessings
To you and yours,
Sincerely,
Sassy
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