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Winter Nights.

Trees growing up towards the sky,

down into the water, through the ice.

This Mirror, reflecting the stars,

The closest thing to a Miracle 

I've seen since I woke up and saw we were alive.

 

Cold air and hot tempers

Caressing my eyes,

Vapors rising from the depths,

White as the smoke you breathed,

Dissipating  on the winds,

To an invisible warmth.

 

Silent fear contends with screaming  pride,

Each one commanding it's own power over us

Like the Moon rules the tides

But in sweeping us out to see each is neautralised

and we are free from the burden of thier burning rage.

 

Life catches in my chest,

And no fluttering similie matches the

maddening rythm of my heart 

As it races my body to the line in the sand.

 

So here it ends,

With a broken sigh,

A satisfied smile,

My way of saying, tonight is change

And Good Morning Miracle.  

Author notes

*laughs* started out as a description of this lake We found while wandering in the woods last night. an expanse of marshland, flooded by the rain then completely frozen, with trees growing up out of the ice, the water so high that we could only see the top half of the trees. beautiful and inspiring. I don't know quite what happened to the poem after that. but the stanza that rhymes is random, as is the last one. but the rest of it is decent enough.

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  • Kathraina silver member
    July 21
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    Very nice job with this piece!
    I love the imagery and smooth flow here.
    Bravo



    ♥Kate


  • Nephlim
    June 16, 2008

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    Thank you for following the rules!

    I've done that, started writing about one thing and it turns into another, and I don't mind the random rhyming. I really loved the ending stanza, =] Good luck!


  • Lord Darius Avalion
    January 16, 2008

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    I like the flow. and I liked the last part.
    Not completely sure what it means. All in all, Excelent work.