There’s none of address, name, or trace,
just huddled lines on paper’s face
and flute and harp, and heaven’s sound
as words of love with love compound...
your touch of lace.
The soft of morning’s bird and song -
to one I know they all belong,
with autumn ribbons tied around,
with love you sent, with love I found...
my heartbeat strong.
When feelings plunge in tender blue
and lonesome nights taint morning’s hue,
I wish for that ascending light
I wish to see... to hold you tight...
and whispers true.
My poem ain’t a gem antique,
I lack in words, in skills, technique,
my only gift - my heart, my life,
you call me rhyme, you call me wife...
your love unique.
Author notes
POY
theme: Ode to love - rhyming poetry
Many thanks to all of you my dear friends for so nice comments and applauses.
In a list
A contest entry
- DAWN--Happy New Year! by micol.
525 points, ended January 13, 2008, 6 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Options! Prewrites accepted. by after-silence.
900 points, ended July 14, 2008, 21 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Lovely! I found myself reading this out loud. The words flow so nicely, and the poem sounds as beautiful as its meaning. The images are so vivid and perfect. Thank you for entering my contest!
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Sonja, it's beautiful!
Loved especially "autumn ribbons tied around". You have a wonderful way of expressing yourself. Blessings!
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Sonja, this was intricate as the weave...beautifully constructed with a delicate touch. Bravo on the Bronze
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Reading and re-reading the poem has been a pleasure. I do like the unexpected shape of the stanza form and the way you used it to focus meaning in the final truncated line. Well done, and congratulations.
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Thank you. I am glad that you like it and thanks a lot for trophy.
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Always Divine
It gives me so much energy and freshness reading your words Sonja, enough to let me carry on and struggle in the hard days. and The LOVE AND PASSION YOU INSPIRE THROUGH YOUR WORDS ARE SO MAGNIFICENT. I would have loved to convey my feelings that way but there is no better way than yours my friend.
I WOULD DEDICATE IT, IF YOU DONT MIND, TO MY LOVE DR. OGUZ SOYSAL.
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Thank you my dear friend. Each poet has a special way to express her/his feelings. I do not mind if you dedicate it to your love until I am signed as author of it. I will be honored because you choose this one, one of my favorite poem.
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I like the structure of your odic stanzas, with the springboard in line 5 to the final rhyming phrase. Nicely done. Thank you for entering.
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wow!
this poem is awesome and is definitely going into my bookmarks.
i like the theme of love and how beautifully you captured it without going overboard. The theme is not common which is very good. The second stanza was particularly brilliant for me. I like autumn and how you wove the birds chirping is phenomenal. lol! so many adverbs. 
best of wishes in the contest!
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Thank you transit. I am sos glad that you like it. It was like somebody turned back light on after arkbear's comment.
~Sonja~
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I had to read this a few times, just because it flowed so well. beautiful
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This is a truly wonderful poem. The rhymes are perfect and the structure is beautiful. This poem took me under its wing and made me experience another side of depiction. Its so nice, i read it twice.
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Thank you. Your comment is awesome too
~Sonja~
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you lack absolutely nothing in words, skills, technique, this poem is fabulous, beautiful, impressive, way beyond the artistry of words lies the artistry of the idea.
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After your comment full of so special adjectives I am really in lack of words except to say - thank you.
~Sonja~
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This is really a special poem!
Best wishes to you in the contest!
Your odes to love are wonderful.
Write on!
*PEACE*
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Thank you very much islekine. I am glad that you like it.
~Sonja~
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Such a wonderful, soft feel to this. Full of images, read nicely and I really enjoyed it.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
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Thank you dear aboomer.
~Sonja~
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Very Enjoyable!!!
This is a great poem! It flowed steadily and is well thought out and put together! The form of this piece gave strength and emotion to your words as I read! Overall, this is a fabulous write! Best of luck in this event! And Happy Holidays!!!
Matthew
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Thank you Matthew-Parry for your kind visit to read my poetry. I saw that we are in the same run and that will make it much interesting and exciting. Happy Holidays to you too.
~Sonja~
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this is amazing...I love the rhyme scheme, I love the message, this is written very, very well, so light & lovely..
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Ohm.. March, March...with your comments you are always bringing springtime to my site. Thank you my dear friend.
~Sonja~
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your poems always flow so nicely! i love the imagery in the first two stanzas, it really illustrates love in such a beautiful way!
good luck in the contest!
LXF
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Dear friend, you comments always echoes on my site from your great heart. Thank you
~Sonja~
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SO, SO BEAUTIFUL!!!!
One does not always have to write smoothly or with perfect rhyme to show their love. They only have to be sincere and true.
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Well, after I saw the title of your comment I had to stop taking a deep breath to say how much I thank you for your always great and friendly support. I am glad that you like it for I always write about sincere and true feelings. Sometimes it is with rhyme, sometimes fee style, but always - love. That is what I count.
~Sonja~
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Your poem flows with the special sound of your heart, your soul, and such a true pleasure to read. I found myself reading it over and over again and each time I did it felt just as special as the first time. I would like to wish you the best of luck in the contest but I think it is worth its weight in gold.
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My dear friend, your comments are always precious to me and I know that you comment like a fine love poetry lover as well as a poet. Thank you for your golden comment but let's see what judges will say about my poem. Thank you for your good wishes. Hope to see you in the same contest.
~Sonja~
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This IS POY!! So enjoyeable and lovely!! You just put love into words... beautiful work, Sonja! I love it.
~Namita
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Dear Namita, thank you for naming my poem POY before the end of contest. You always praise my poetry making me to blush. I am so glad that you like it. I hope to see your poetry in the same contest too.
~Sonja~
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I love it!
I very much enjoyed the sing song rhythm of this piece Sonja, the rhyme was excellent as well. I was waiting for this one. Good luck to you my friend in this competition. Your words sing to me!
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My dear sis, I know how much you like the right rhythm and good rhyme. I will never be so good as you are but I will learn it to become better. Thank you. And of course, let the best win!
~Sonja~
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Wistful
"with love you sent, with love I found...
my heartbeat strong."
The yearning you have hidden between the lines is deep and moving. The letter starts a train of thought which leads to affirmation of love despite separation. This is a wonderful poem, which seems simple, but its symbols bring in a whole life.
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Dear Sandal, I am here to say thanks to you too, for your always great comments and applause. Thank you for a deep and meaningful review on my poetry.
~Sonja~
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Love like this is unique, special, rare, beautiful... and you wrote it with such a gentle touch. This one makes me sigh, my friend... Feels as if one should sing this poem!
~ Nicolette
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So, I will start to answer to all comments and as always, first to you my dear Nicolette. Recently I was very busy and now I am here to share thoughts with my poetical friends and other poets. Thank you for your time to read my poetry and thank you for all other kind of supports you always gave to me.
~Sonja~
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