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Septic suggestions of feeling (slide)
Seldom through
Harbinger's embrace
As a feather in storm
Flowing on cushion of stagnant (fears)
Composed notes
Or
Meaningless words jotted and spoken
In composed gesture we mirrored their prose
Wishfully intended to please
Just sustained longer
In scales of mediocrity

Oh so trivial are
The mundane, mostly (mortal)
Respected, trite concerns

To unfurl,
to belay,
to underly
A cause for affecting

Despondent issues .
The lie seeding (counterfeit)
Grows savory ideals
Much to offspring's regret
They've become
Disillusioned quanta

Extrinsic beauty

Sought
Resplendent
Duller, the atomic level
Mostly codependent

It's, thoughts we're missing
It's between
Definition
(Subliminal
  Producing rhythm
Spawned of proper timing
Tightly unravel
To loss or meaning
Thought provoked gravity
Helplessly
Round off levity)
Digression
A diversion

Hidden carefully,
Etched in our gray,
With transparent disgust,
All shape eludes the molten routine
In absence
Form degrades
Faceted decay

Untamed, the wild order (silence)
Style
Sans grace stained glass, a scattered silicate
Woven in crude designs

Hidden, our aquarium of idiom (deflated)
Prescribed therapy
(Through)
Packaged sanity

Detached shards
Remain of inner reflection

Inhaled through deeper meditation
Small doses of clarity

        It's fake
        Intellect
(as in your intellect)
And you sit around
        Regurgitate(ing)
        Intricate
        Seemingly
        Complicated

        Progression(s)
(of ideas that aren't your own)
(while you)
        Assimilate
(even more)
        Retrograde

        Fiction

        Based (in)
        Faith (of)
        Sensual
(subjective truths)
                a
        Reduction
(of what you've stolen)

        Entropic
        Emotional
        Neutrality

        Chaos
        Grounded
        Duality
        Particle
        Wave

        Light

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  • passionate-poet
    April 11, 2008

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    a very interesting play on words.. i liked the poem thanks for sharing with the rest of us keep up the great writing !


  • philosphyofkate
    December 21, 2007

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    i liked the end of this, but the beginning of the other one better... and you changed my favourite part... hmmmph

  • Sign of the Swine
    December 20, 2007

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    That first stanza is amazing. I really liked the layout of this poem and I thought the way it was set up kept the poem flowing in an interesting way. Nice write.