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Soco NewYear is Past-Tense

Through diluted airwaves
Over the highways
Listening the passing cars
We're not to far
But this time is the end
My hearts lost and hard to defend
Never miss the echos
They have something like all these "I told you so's"

Its been past-tense for awhile
Why do we string out these smiles
Read the eulogies and sing something a little less quiet
This isn't my funeral
But it is after all
She cries to me go back to bed
I just can't get the echoing substance out of my head
I'll leave quick
This air is thick and I think I'll be sick

My friend pass the bottle around
Listen to these empty screaming sounds
Remember the times when we were alright
Best friends meant so much more on those nights
But tonight it ends at this bar
I'll drive off this bridge with this car
One last memory for you
Lets get out of this smoky room
Another night singing
Another night spent downstairs abusing
But tonight its all been done
We knew we were the best and had our fun

Our talent scared them

We knew how far we've been

But we still meant nothing

We knew we had something

But it wasn't enough

What are these drugs you spoke of

This venue's never seen anything like this

But everything we do has been dismissed

They told us we weren't good enough

We're musicians not what they spoke of

 

This Russian Winter ends with this toast

The Soco  NewYear has begun

but its over I can't let it go

All I wanted to be is something we sung

 

But these words are forever
And this overpass says never
These words are over
This requiem is not to be sang ever
This is my funeral
The times we had were worth all

Author notes

And perhaps that is what my heart is dying to believe.

This contest is hard I tried my best but this is what came out its about me and my bestfriend me and him arent really friends anymore since the band broke up. I hope you enjoy the poem.

Soco NewYear-the name me and my bestfriend gave 2007 at the big New Years party where between us we drank 3 fifths of soco and a traditional 30 case.If you were wondering The Russian Winter was the name for winter 2006. And soco is warmer then winter so we figured we'd make 2007 the best year ever. Ha turned out pretty shitty

There's a video I'm uploading so you can here the song that inspired this poem and see a few pictures there old me and him never get the pictures we take for people.

btw since the day this was written we're back. there's two other lyrics that you can see the fun we used to have.

http://allpoetry.com/poem/3729354
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3729398

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  • Skwisgaar Skwigelf
    September 12, 2008
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    well done.


  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    January 23, 2008

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    Great flow to this piece. It depicts the theme well and is effective with its message. Very nicely done and good luck to you.

  • abba12
    January 21, 2008

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    I like this, well written, it sounded like a song, very lyrical. I suppose it's not really about new year though, not as much as I would have liked. So I don't think I can give it a top 3 place. However this does deserve a HM.


  • Angel Full Of Hurt
    January 1, 2008

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    very lovely

    Wow you write well...cooool lyrics...yeah i'll check on your other lyrics soon..anyway i like this Soco new year..very nice...a little sad....a little bitter...but wow, i enjoyed reading this!


  • filth in th beuty
    December 27, 2007
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    i hope u and him can be friends again someday


  • filth in th beuty
    December 27, 2007
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    Great Write :)

    great poem - i loved it - sorry about ur friend though


  • broken skylines
    December 22, 2007
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    Dude, this is seriously one of my favorites, ever.
    fix your spelling errors. its annoying. haha


  • Exhaled Cynn
    December 22, 2007

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    I did enjoy the poem very much..and the soft cryptic messages within your words were very refreshing!!! It is definitely a nice poem...there are, however, a few spelling errors that I'm not sure about. The very first word in the poem is 'threw'...as if you were throwing a ball...which could work..but I'm not sure if that's what you meant...if not...it should be spelled 'through'...and then in your third stanza...fourth line I believe...you said 'thoughs nights'...I'm pretty sure you meant 'those nights'....But if not feel free to tell me! Just thought I'd point those out to you and give you a chance to review your entry before the final judging!

    Good contest entry! I really enjoyed reading it.

    Good luck!

    Cynn


  • b e a u t i f u l
    December 21, 2007

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    How terrible... I'm sorry you aren't on good terms with your friend. I like the parts about the echoes. There are few typos in here.. not a big problem but you might want to go back and fix them. I'll go through and find them, if you want. =] Overall though, I really like it. I'm so sorry about your friend... looks like you miss him pretty bad. Maybe you guys can be friends again someday. I hope so =] Good luck in your contest


  • Xx Luna xX
    December 21, 2007
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    Wow!!!!!!

    Truly great!! Wow! One of the best poems I have read... Great job!


  • HarleyHypnotize
    December 20, 2007
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    This was an amazing poem,one of my faves!

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