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the sky was grey


today I looked up and the sky was grey
then I called your name 
your laugh resonated through the day.
you made me happy this way.
fasinations with butterfly wings and razorblade kisses.
just be happy and that will fulfill my wishes.
Evanesence fills the room,
as the candle light glistens in your eyes.
You take notice as teardrops exclaim distress,
maybe happiness. Its so sad to see.
When you look at me what do you see?
Until now I could never cease to be unhappy.
I dont care if you laugh with or at me,
as long as your still laughing. smiling.
you are destined to enbody no less than happiness.
you take me out of this cest-pool of depression.
call my name whenever you want to be with me,
for I have no objections.
how is it that you can love something like me?
why is it that you obsess over a monster such as i?
but i love you.
when you cry i lay with my eyes open wide at night,
it is then that i want to die. but i dont die.
because i know that would only bring more tears to your eyes.
I love you and I will always be here for you.
always in spirit if not physical.
You will always be a part of me.







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  • Clovis...Curious silver member
    October 1, 2008

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    Excellent

    A very fine write, Imagery, rhythm and rhyme are just fine. Thanks for sharing this one with us. Again, well done.


  • princessleejwctlvr2
    October 1, 2008

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    This is so sweet!! Aww you did a very amazing job!! Such great details and descriptions in this piece!!! This is so beautiful!!! Your word flow is lovley!! This poem is chalk full of sweet things all the way around!!! I love the way you wrote this!! It brings warm happy thoughts to my mind!!


  • aanika
    September 30, 2008

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    I dont care if you laugh with or at me,
    as long as your still laughing. smiling.

    that is SO SWEET
    and this is so sad
    but beautiful.
    nice write.


  • DarkLotus4Life.
    December 29, 2007
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    This poem has a lot of emotion in it. I love it.


  • Barely Breathing gold member
    December 21, 2007

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    This is one of the best poems that I have read tonight. I absolutely love this poem, it is so filled with worrying about what someone else thinks about you and at the same time, knowing they dont care. This is really such an inspirational poem, well done, this is great.

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