Caressing darkness one final time
Angelic angel from her world divine
Releases her love from deep within
Enchanting the beast alluring him in
Sensual seductress who floats on air
Suppressing demons that are there
Inducing the dark submit them to love
Never relenting her pursuit from above
Guided by one thing devotion of love.
Author notes
Author: Timespell
A contest entry
- Rule by the People round two by star wars fanatic.
450 points, ended March 24, 2008, 16 entries
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Comments
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beautiful flow in this one. The acrostic poems are something i have never been able to do myself. i love this piece yet again...
blessed be,
georgie,
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Thanks Georgie. I actually do a lot of poems like this with acrostic thrown in.
Even some of my dark poems have hidden messages..lol
Thanks for reading.
~T.S~
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awww. wow. this is just simply amazing, it flows so well and just fits so perfect and nice wording and meaning and all, just really enjoyed tis alot =)
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Thanks Luna
Thanks for your nice comment Luna... It was based on a picture prompt, so I hope I dun it justice.
All the best,
~T.S~
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Just a personal preference, I wouldn't end a second line with the same word that was already used. And of course the angel is angelic, so I'd probably try to find another descriptive word for the angel. But other than those things, the poem was pretty good... because each line is like a poem in itself, but all work together to form a bigger purpose for the whole that it is. Good job.
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Thanks
Well it is an Acrostic poem that I was playing around with... I see what your saying but sometimes I like to just leave things the way they are.
Thanks for reading and for your suggestions.
All the best,
~T.S~
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