You are
my life's reason
for living:
a star
in my dark firmament.
You are
an oasis of love
in the desert
of my soul:
a sanctuary, permanent.
I will
love you far
beyond the reaches
of Time's decay
or earth's demise.
Our souls
will always be
in total harmony,
reflected in
each other's eyes.
My love,
forever I am,
and you are,
a single, undiluted
perfect star!
Author notes
A dedication of love to the woman in my life--who shall remain nameless. She will know who she is.
A contest entry
- Pay an Earth Angel, Please by klassy lassy.
1000 points, ended January 3, 2008, 7 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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star light, star bright, first star I see tonight...
This made me think of that old nursery rhyme and warmed me inside with the remembrance. I like the sustaining continuity of the love resonating in the subtle rhyme and currents of this poem. "a single, undiluted perfect star!" If she's as sentimental as I am, I think she would be looking through rainbows reading this. ~ Klassy
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Excellent write! Love sees nothing but perfection in it's truest form.
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This is well written with sincerity which was felt by the reader.The subtle religious references held this love aloft as sacred, not just sensual or sexual but the truest of love's for one human being for another.The piece is imbued with an uncompromized lyrical flow which has a natural lilt.The longevity of such love will resonate for time immormorial whereas those that are only able to lust will know only the heat of the moment followed by the coldness after no inherent closeness,for true warmth lingers, resonates and is felt within the fronds of this life and the afterlife.A SuperNova indeed.
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Deeply stirring
This write smoothed the bumps of the day and flowed right into my old heart. Wheat more can I say? Perfection.
wolfie
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Thank you very much, Wolfie--guess I'm just an incurable old romantic!
Bill
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I will
love you far
beyond the reaches
of Time's decay
i love these lines... my husband and i had 'forever and a day' engraved on our wedding ring and even tho i have a boyfriend too, ill love my husband forever and a day... true love is never forgotten but sometimes left before you wind up dead. a beautiful stunning piece and the star won me over
hugs,
georgie,
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Thank you, georgie, for your kind words--really pleased you like this onr.
Bill
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So many reasons to decribe what a perfect love can mean to a person Bill. This is so absolutely beautiful.Your words here will speak for many a silent tongue.Truly a wonderful write......mal
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Thanks, Mal, your kind response is very much appreciated.
Cheers,
Bill
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This is really sweet. I would honestly dedicate this poem to my boyfriend because I feel this way as well. Nice poem.
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Thank you, Secret, it's good of you to comment.
Cheers,
Bill
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