Burning within and tormented soul,
My eyes are pure infected flames,
Living so far apart and life being so difficult,
But whenever I catch sight of him,
My mind runs riot and his invading trance I am lost in,
I'm weeping with crystal tears tracing the lines on my face,
I really don't know what else to say,
That will make him look my way again...
How was I to know about his secret,
When he never wore his ring..?
His luring icy cold eyes and sensual smile,
The chilling blue eyes that made my core run cold,
That offering of such a heated thrill that followed,
So tantalisingly tasty,
His moist tongue that caresses mine,
Lost together, in our seering heat...
All our worries and cares,
Shut tight behind closed doors,
How greedy I feel when I'm alone with him,
His starving eyes that stare at me from a far,
Makes me feel shy and embarassed,
For he should not be looking at me the way he does,
But I love how he stares,
I'd do anything for him to belong to me...
Author notes
A mixture of some of my favourite lines from previous writes.
In a list
A contest entry
- Your Best Lines by Danna Hobart.
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Comments
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A very good story deep within the lines you have chosen
from your other writes...I must say that it is difficult to lurk in the shadows of love when one is a forbidden love...Yet the power of the emotion will cause us to embark on missions that we thought we would never travel on before...Great write...
Good Luck
Blessings
~Cheryl~
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This is very good, taken lines from your other poem to come up with this. Interesting story you told within your write.
I enjoyed.
Good luck in the contest.
loveandblessings2u & yours always
joyce
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I really like how you have drawn lines from previous writes, yet still created a poem with wonderful flow and comprehension... I really liked the story behind this, and the only thing that I wasn't too sure about was the first line - maybe 'a' instead of 'and' would create a more concrete picture? But that is just my opinion
no offense meant... I really liked this, very sensual and secretive
Keep writing
Polly
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Thanks for entering again.
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Great job, thank you for entering.
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