Seduction has a temple yonder
the freshly milking reed, and the dew does dance
and with breeze's flow,
whence sensuality grasps the heart,
the eye does ache with wonder,
at the softness of that fleeting touch,
the birth of a blushing hue
upon the cheecks of the moon,
and white satin skin
has turned rosy,
as the ripple of a kiss
on the horizon's open dawn.
Dipping the ink furthur,
I traced those memories on wet papyrus
to remind you in lettered dreams,
of the sins that saught so sweet,
and even as I drench thy 'you'
and the written 'i' is astray,
I blush ever deeper,
ever deeper.
A contest entry
- ~Come and seduce me.... by Nature Song.
575 points, ended January 1, 2008, 16 entries
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I would have loved to have judged this entry! But as the rules read...50 line was the max your poem is 54 sorry I cannot judge this great poem. ~Sie
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Um .... the poem is only 20 lines long, you can even count it. It only says 54 on the counter, but just recheck manually, it's only 20.....
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L3 needs a little revision
This, as always, is a stellar penning...well done!
Love you,
Mum
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sometimes you simply amaze me...PK
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WOW... JUST WOW ASFAND!!I LOVE THE BLUSH DEEPER AND DEEPER IMAGE... Beautiful writing!
~Namita
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