The awkwardly bent branches
Tell the the world to go away.
Hiding that shattered old house
Residents thought was vacant.
But they'll never in their lifetime
Know what's behind those walls.
Somethings are better left unsaid.
A contest entry
- Erasing Yesterday by poetryality.
525 points, ended December 20, 2007, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Only when the mind deems itself unsafe does teh images really come out being blurred a bit. This write speaks about secrets (well that's my opinion) -
Very Good
The author uses good imagery and maintains a poetic flow through the whole piece. Nicely structured, well written with poetic flare. Nice flow of words attracting the reader with their imagery, resulting in creating a message above the words reenforced by the imagery.
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This is a very nice interpretation of the picture and of those yesterdays which fade from memory, sometimes leaving only little bits of those memories to live on in speculation.
Good luck in the contest
Dee
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Your poetry paints the picture with poise, and elegance. There is always wonder when whispers wash over our hearts. No need to tell, some know, some do not wish to know. I love the last line here. Very nice take on the picture prompt. Thanks for this entry. I wish you the best in the Comp.
Much Love & Happy Holidays ♥
Renee
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this was a message of you never know unless you have lived there
good poem
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So true! Some things in this life were
never meant to be opened, discovered, or
handled. What may seem so beautiful and
innocent on the outside can be very earth
shattering to someone. I love your take
on this picture prompt. All the best to
you with it in the contest and thanks a lot
for sharing it here!
Jeremy0826 -
wow!
this poem describes very eerily the picture. It is not a very run-of-the-mill picture but you made it work.
I am not a person who stands up to scarey things. I got a bit scared while readin this. It gives a feeling of regret if the secret is spilled like Oandora's box. beaytiful! best of wishes in the ciontest!*Hug*
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I like the ominous twist in your last line.
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