Eyes of deep sensual foliage
Sadness seen from within the caverns
And shores of stability
Este cuerpo es mi vida
Smiles of reciprocal desires
Intoxicated by this fertility
armamentos abren para mi abrazo
Intimate satisfaction, an impression made in sand
Society’s images stroked softly
vivir dentro del corazón
Faces of historic ancestry
Holds firmly to traditional conceit
Combatir esta lucha y la dissension
Hearts left on this bleeding throne
Torn by this loving soul
Sacrificed for the continued existence
This body is my life
Arms open for my embrace
living within your heart
Battling this reality with strife
Author notes
All of the Spanish lines are combined in the last verse. This came to me and I had to add Spanish to it.
A contest entry
- Realism by Tangled Angle.
450 points, ended December 30, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Wonderful
Very creative and terrific use of two languages.
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Thank U - I needed to move away from the norm
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unique
I appreciate that in poetry. I hate when it all sounds the same. I liked how you used two different languages and puts a twist and shows emphasis in the words penned.
Happy Hoildays!
Melanie
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I think it was cool how you used spanish in here, but i don't think it was effective; however, i did like this.
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Thanks.
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Este poema es hermoso! Vine aquí de su competencia. Estoy alegre, maravilloso! La metafora esta de dos personas de diversas culturas que esten en amor. Mi título sería “Cultura Caverna”.
Love,
Amera♥
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Gracias - no es dos personas esta metafora es una isla. pero muchas gracias tambien
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lo siento
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Ohhhh
I think that I have it now, my first opinion was all wrong, but now I believe I have the whole of it but I do not want to give it away to anyone else. So how do I ask without giving away my answer to someone esle if I am right? Excellent write, thank you for sharing and challenging my mind, keep them coming my friend.
raingoddess
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thank U - if your right you're right. You may become the closes to what it is and thats good enough. Most people will have their own thought so who ever comes closes. wins the top prize then so on and so on and
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