ensuing but every Storm
lolls the shadow of noiseless emotions;
which then is conceived but a Lesson
of all of the men and all tokened.
embraced betwixt each droplet
flows a river of and in itself;
though not so apparent--
as a bridge once toppled.
be it not the Element required to live
or the Creed required to die;
but a manual to this Captain
Splashes with each explosion spoken.
As for every droplet
ascends a volatile mist--
an unreliable parent
still though with a Fist.
Author notes
My name: Zirconium.Pants.
The inspiration was a line in A Tale of Two Cities. Quoted exactly:
"...the calm that must follow all storms--emblem to humanity, of the rest and silence into which the storm called Life must hush at last--..."
Page 54, A Tale of Two Cities by Charles Dickens
Decipher:
Noiseless emotions -- Usually emotions are the effect of a cause. I say noiseless because sometimes we don't realize what the effect of that cause is right away, but it is there, definitely.
Betwixt each droplet -- I find it fascinating how many raindrops fall when it storms; for all we know... between every single drop there is a connection between the one that has splashed on the ground and the one still falling through the air. A river of knowledge you cannot see... the drops move so fast... and together-- they can flood a town, or just make a small puddle.
be it no the element required to live -- It is the element required to live, but it is not. It is knowledge, it is... the unknown. It is not religion that falls and flows between each droplet, it is a manual... from you. You are truly the only person who is the Captain in your life.
As for every droplet -- We do obtain these lessons. These lessons are random...
The best of AP!
In a list
A contest entry
- Best of 2007 by B Chandler.
1000 points, ended December 30, 2007, 6 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Survival of the Wittiest by Avatar of Innocence.
500 points, ended February 4, 2008, 18 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - "Wrap Around Yourself and Go" by lie.
300 points, ended August 6, 2008, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Prewrites for Comments :] by ElectricBloom.
700 points, ended November 23, 2008, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Is my symbolism apparent?
Comments
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Beautiful.
I LOVE the third stanza, it blew me away
and the final stanza is perfect, i love the rhyme and the imagery it holds - a fantastic way to end such a brilliant poem.
Well done! A truly enjoyable piece to read.
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congrats on the trophies! I really enjoyed the author notes too. We were just talking about this tale yesterday. I'm trying to get my granddaughter to read it. thank you for entering
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Great write
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This is a great piece.
Thank you for entering and good luck.
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A truly beautiful write with vivid and wonderful imagery. I really enjoyed reading this, it had such good flow even though some of the stanzas didn't rhyme.
Congratulations.
Good luck in the contest.
Chin up,
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Wow;t this was just amazing.
I am at a loss of words.
Congrats on the trophies awarded-- well deserved
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lovely poem with an interesting inspiration.
Thank you so much for the author's notes. I admit I did not quite follow a few parts 
The rhyme is beautiful and the length is just right.
background was awesome too!! congrats on the trophies and good luck in the contest!
transit~
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wow. wow. wow.
i loved this. from start to end. everything about this is great. the symbolism was vague but it was there and of you read it well and proper the first time, you can definitely catch it.
lovely piece of work here
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I love the light, yet powerful rhyme used in the last stanza. Nicely done and thank you for entering my contest.
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excellent write! I read a tale of two cities in High School. I am always impressed to find people on this site who actually read and write good poetry, not just write about cutting and boyfriends. Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest
Arrianna
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I love it, it's just wow...
I don't really know what to say just awesome job
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Your inspiration from "A tale of two cities" was so appropriate for this contest. That is one of my favorite books of all time. You have captured the prompt and made it your own! Thanks for entering and best wishes in the contest!
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I have to read that again, that was wonderful! A tale of two cities that is (well the poem too, but I meant specifically A tale of two cities). This was wonderful inspiration. I liked your choice of words. Though the capitalization (lack of I mean) confused me a little, but beautifully written.
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oh my this is so good, the situation bring imingery to lite, good job on this,good luck in her contest..MM
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Thanks for joining in with your inspiration from
The inspiration was a line in A Tale of Two Cities. Quoted exactly:
"...the calm that must follow all storms--emblem to humanity, of the rest and silence into which the storm called Life must hush at last--..."
Certainly you have captured the thunder after the storm.
Thanks for joining in.
Love and Light
Frozentearz -
I like the last stanza of this one a lot! and noticed also it is the only stanza where you used rhyme was that on purpose or coincidence?
anyway, thank you for this entry as well!
Leander -
Oh, to answer your question, yes, your symbolisims are very apparent, as to what your symbolisms MEAN, that is still left to be deciphered. I gave a crack at it, and though you are right to encourage others to interpret your poem in their way and not yours, it is still fun to tell what you were trying to convey in your poem.
Finding out what your poem meant to someone else is very entertaining and fulfilling. Here you go
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I took your advice. I am going to put a decipher in the author notes of most of my poems. I believe it will help people understand what I am trying to say, what I mean, and what I want people to get out of reading what I write.
Thank you.
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Seems as if you also took a shine to E.E. Cummings flaunting of convention. While it may seem cute to Capitalize a word or few in a line, All the Attention that you are trying to Ellicit from the Audience can make them Tired easily. i'm not Saying don't Capitalize words, but Do so Only to show Emphasis on what you want to say. I've tried what You attempted to do Once, and all it got Me were raised Eyebrows, and not In the Sexy come-hither Fashion.
Your poem's content however, is very well-crafted, if totally ambiguous. It reminds me of communism (menion of Fist) and the joining together of water and captain allude to a possible war, especially dealing with ships...I hope.
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you are quite the emily dickinson lover! unfortunately i was never good at discerning her writing--too abstract for my brain! would you mind explicating this for me? i would love to revisit
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I can explain this for you. But maybe you should try figuring it out for yourself? It takes the fun out of it if I just tell the world what they mean. You are supposed to get out of my poems what you want to get out of them, not what I get out of them!
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A Tale of Two Cities would bring about some wonderful inspiration to many. It has been years since I read this book and can still remember what a difficult time many had understanding back in school. Much of your words here has in fact done the same as the book in keeping with strong imagery and symbolism. Thank you for entering. Best of luck to you!
Blessings
Bel
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Nice
Well, this is awesome...Great job...
"As for every Droplet
ascends a Volatile Mist--
an Unreliable parent
still though with a Fist."
Were my favorite lines, and the only suggestion I'd have is, to take out the random capitalizations in the middle of stanzas, like "Every Storm" and "Bridge once Toppled".
It just seems random to me...but other than that, it's a great poem.
Thanks for entering, and good luck
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Thanks so much for your entry!
Write on!
This is a well done piece..
*PEACE*
Happy New Year!
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Your symbolism is wonderful. I love A Tale of Two Cities, it is one of my favorite novels. I loved your use of capitalization for emphasis in this poem. This is an amazing piece.
Thank you for entering and all the best in the contest.
Happy New Year!
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This is quite good. Wonderful use of imagery and flow. Thanks for entering my contest and best of luck!
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The opening lines for this was a bit of a confusement for me but then as I read onward, the seepage of aspired metaphors came slowly out. Keep penning -
8.5-9 (judging on scale of 1-10)
i liked this, it's extremely vivid and the words used are very powerful. must admit i was slightly disapointed reading your notes (partially because I despise charles dickens as a writer who pandered to the lowest common denominator), one would hope that such beautiful words were completely original and founded only in the mind of the writer. -
hmm
This was beautiful! the flow of words were impressive! and i admire the depth of this poem! Your last stanza was truely amazing! it meant so much!
Thank you very much for following all my rules... and thanks for entering! really appreciated!
And wishing you all the best of lcuk in my sontest!
Much love always,
Ranji
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Before giving final commentary, take this suggestion: To kill the confusion of having an entry in several contests, pull your entry out of the contest(s) that has already been judged and closed. -
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Most of the contests this is in are still running or haven't been judged completely yet.
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This was a truly amazing piece. It was deep, meanngful, and also beautifully written. It shows your intelligence and depth of thought as well as your skills as a poet. It's beyond Wonderful.
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Thank you very much. Your comment was beyond wonderful.
Toodles!
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There is an interstsing use of language in this poem it is kind of 'old style' in its use of words and inversions. i guess it is inspired by the style of writing from the 19th century.
My emotional response to this is sadness and emapathy. the last couplet hits home with impact and concern.
an Unreliable parent
still though with a Fist.
It's good that you use symbolism in this poem to get across your point. that shows that you know something about the way good poetry works and how it can move us deeply.
season's greetings,
myron.
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YES,
your symbolism is apparent, to me anyways. glad you mentioned the Dickens reference. Made it a bit clearer. I think this is a great poem...everything that it should be. well executed.
Creatress
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Awesome!
Your use of capitalization in this poem really makes certain phrases stand out, such as "Splashes with each Explosion Spoken". Certainly an excellent effect that makes this poem great!
The vocabulary you use is impressive, especially the word "betwixt". I rarely hear it but I love the way it sounds. Really, all of the words fit together to create something beautiful.
Awesome write.
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Beautiful
Beautiful and wonderfully crafted. Your gemstone words paint a everlasting masterpiece that is worthy of the crown jewels... Amazing job!
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Thank you for entering my contest! This poem caught my eye as it was quite diffrent from most. I learned a couple new words which i always am grateful for.... ( vocabulary is an ongoing thing). I was pleasently surprised by this poem, and lso was wondering what the inspiration behind it was? Good luck!
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The inspiration, honestly, was a line in A Tale of Two Cities. Quoted exactly:
"...the calm that must follow all storms--emblem to humanity, of the rest and silence into which the storm called Life must hush at last--..."
Page 54, A Tale of Two Cities by Charles Dickens
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