I've been thinking of my life,
and the path that I am taking,
is this really what I want?
My dreams, am I forsaking?
I can be much more than this,
I can feel it in my heart,
these choices that I've made,
really aren't that smart.
I've been told my whole life,
I have a good head on my shoulders,
I will go so far,
I can climb above the boulders,
but thinking of myself,
and the steps that I have taken,
I feel I'm crawling under them,
the world, was it mistaken?
I don't like where I am,
I hate what I've become,
it's time to turn around,
no longer can I succumb.
I'm learning more about life,
every time I swim astray,
I'm growing as a person,
every time I reach the quay,
writing this helped me realize,
the world, it wasn't awry,
I'm overcoming obstacles,
and in the end I know I'll fly.
All the ones who doubted me,
I'll prove them all so wrong.
All those who believed in me,
their wait I wont prolong,
because I'm making a new path,
right here and right now,
I'll see how far it takes me,
some day and some how.
Author notes
originally i was writing a blog on my myspace, but the i ended up using phrases that sounded more like poetry than actual sentences so i decided to edit it some and write it in a poem form rather than sentences
A contest entry
- TEENAGERS - We're not all thick, yeah? #2 by LaurenLightning--x.
730 points, ended May 7, 2008, 42 entries
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Comments
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This is beautiful.
So honest, I really don't know what to say. I'm almost lost for words. I suppose it's because I can relate to this, I like to think I know how this feels.
I love he lines :
I can climb above the boulders,
but thinking of myself,
and the steps that I have taken,
I feel I'm crawling under them,
The imagery throughout this piece is amazing, but especially in those lines.
I wish I could say more, but everything I can think of to say just doesn't fit. This is simply a beautiful piece.
Thank you for entering and goodluck!
Arc-En-Ciel--x
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very strong feelings with this you are going to prove to everyone i am here i have arived you are head stong and maybe for the first time feel you belong
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