Pulse beating heart racing...
Mind searching for the unattainable
Adrenaline readily pumping through arteries
Grasp tightly to this risk
Blankets of roses.. Orchids and silk
Gifts.. Wine.. dancing through the night
White gold 12k diamond... I love you
Grasp tightly to this boy
Showers of rain... sunshine and waves
Mountains and canyons... hotels
Airports tickets of various sources.
Grasp tightly to this getaway
Pink fleece stroller with safety effects
Bottles and cribs.. diapers
Rosy cheeks powder soft skin
Grasp tightly to this child
Never ending syllables.... needles and pills
Diagnostic sheets........cures.. or so they say
Alcohol swaps. Antiseptic white walls
Grasp tightly to this life
A contest entry
- it's alarming how loud the silence screams-- by noir eyes.
300 points, ended March 2, 2008, 44 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Inspire me! by reinhardt-napoleon.
300 points, ended February 3, 2008, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I wouldn't say "grasp tightly to this boy" well, in this poem it works well, but in real love, don't grasp too hard, or he may want to get free, but not to loosely, or you may lose him. haha, other than that stupid side-track moment, great poem, I must say, you did very well. I enjoyed it. Great work, keep it up.
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very good
there seems to be a progression through the verses from courtship to parenthood to old age and illness.you such a lot insuch a few lines it definitely took me on a journey and i agree with your message well done.
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Very nicely done and I do like some of the images brewing in this one. Good luck in the contest.
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very deep in thought, compels one to revise himself and his state.
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Good!
I didn't particularly like the beginning part of this poem, to be hounest, but it really picked and as a whole it is very well done. Good clear meaning, and good style. Merry Christmas.
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