Ear to rhythm
hands to beat, melody flows
eyes to street
happier notes rise
to the tinny ring
singing in the cup;
frivolity grows
anticipating pub,
ale might be sweeter
sipped and filled night long and
livening smoky haze
with lilting melody
and boisterous song;
but for now the hour is a test
setting day streets fall to quiet
and softer side of night hums
'neath glowing lamp light,
wishes float below
hot bowl, cool swill
and familiar heat of rum
pints and devil's smiles behind
girlish hands
hefting purses and sobriety;
assizing liklihood
of quickly falling eyelids.
Author notes
Prompt: Original work- Ariosto
In a list
A contest entry
- Street Musicians ` image contest from my original work by ariosto.
1000 points, ended January 10, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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i like the way tis one sounds. Wonderful use of rhyme...just enough
Good one
thanks for entering!
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I think this poem has a very fun rhythm...it's all very catchy...especially the opening.
Síochán leat
~Mairéad~
. Rewarded 4
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"Ear to rhythm
hands to beat, melody flows
eyes to street"
You had my foot tapping on this read, from the very first word to the last. Nice images in this one. The artists brush strokes give us a collective of images, pulling a myriad of characters together in one moment. Your words do the same, giving pause for the reverie and a moments connection. Nice job. ~SoAp
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It must be something about the picture, but i think most of the poems in this contest are amongst the best ive read on AP in ageees! And this one sits veryfirmly near the top!
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I loved the opening lines here and the way you set the mood - wonderful! A great piece of writing... the title is perfect too.
~ Nicolette
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Wow. That is some piece. I went and looked at the artwork afterwards and you have given it a new life in verse. Well done with this. Excellent work. ~Pamela
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