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Your Playpen

Corrupted by you again
I find myself back here
In your twisted playpen

 

 

 Tumbling through your slide of lies

Falling from your monkeybars of deception

Playing hide and go seek

Longing to not be found

 

Back and forth I go 

On your tainted swing of love

Condemed to never get off

 

Corrupted by you again
I find myself back here
Here in your twisted playpen

 

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  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    March 1, 2008

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    Great write, you really captured the tortuous cycle of self abuse (that's what it is when you don't get out). I love the poem and I like the wallpaper! Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.

    ♥
    whisper


  • Mr Majenta gold member
    January 17, 2008
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    aaah! this is awesome. an i love the pic


    • GypsyEyes
      January 23, 2008
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      thank you! i saw your option for twisted love and poof! this poem i thought you'd might like! good luck your contest!

  • OhNoChastity
    January 16, 2008

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    Ahhh distress. This was lyrical in quality and I love the extended metaphor. I think if it were made longer or perhaps with more images and detailed expansion, this poem could be WONDERFUL.


  • The Madman silver member
    December 30, 2007

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    Very nicely penned, creative with good imagery used throughout and congrats on the HM. Nicely done,

    Evan


  • Lady Australis silver member
    December 29, 2007

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    its a very good poem for my mothers contest
    thankyou
    congrats on hm


  • going nowhere
    December 21, 2007

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    this was so good... and how true. so many times we can get caught like that... but then there are the other times that we might just want to be. congrats on the trophy too.


  • sidewinder silver member
    December 20, 2007

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    thy crimson tears fall within that twisted tale where pain laughs and jeers leaving one empty!


    Yes I hear this one clearly!

    Keep penning on one stroke at a time!
    Bill

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    December 20, 2007

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    Oh I love this very nice take indeed thank you for your entry goodluck in the contest best wishes and much love


  • samantha jean
    December 20, 2007
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    I love the phrase 'twisted playpen'
    Awesome and creative write.

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