Playful breezes nudge waking flowers
sprinkling the ground with dewy showers.
Cotton candy clouds dot the sky,
billowing puffs of white hug high.
Dandelion tufts tickle the nose
filling the air when the wind blows.
Chirping birds hunting in tall grass
chase dragonfly wings clear as glass.
Spit beetles spin their frothy home
as skittish chipmunks boldly roam.
Fragile webs glistening with dew
boast an iridescent hue.
A hazy sun slows its descent
and its scorching heat will not relent.
Raspberries dapple the hedge
trailing the road at its edge.
In bush or field with shirt too thin
mosquitoes drill sunburnt skin.
Grasshoppers fly on thin paper wings
flooding my mind with summer things.
A contest entry
- Summer by sheltered.
525 points, ended January 1, 2008, 10 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Superb Plus +
'tis a fine write, indeed. Imagey, most excellent, rhythm and rhyme are just fine. Reminds me of two different ones which I wrote. One called: "Whimsical Cloudy Critters", and the other one: "Whimsical None Since Time Began"
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This is really really awesome. I like how you compare things to toys and thing of that sort. I really like it because it makes me feel warm in the dead of winter. It's all bright and shiny and happpy and it makes me very happy too. I like the rhyme scheme. You did very good with it. There's only one flow problem. The 3rd line doesn't flow so well, but other than that it's awesome. Great job. ALyssa
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oh wow...
congrats on the well deserved bronze!
your rhyme is INCREDIBLE...
I so envy your skill...
this is a wonderful read...
great job!
Blessings! Tammy
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Excellent rhyme. This flowed perfectly and seemed almost completely unforced. Great imagery.
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a stunning piece... the first lines make me think of the flowers bathing nude coz of the skimpy breeze lol. pass me some of those raspberries please... yum.
hugs,
georgie,
xxx
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