Touched by warm sun,
I am seed in wet ground
something within heeds an unspoken call
reaching for light
stretching forth empty hand;
there was warmth in words
touching brutal cold to thaw
and nourishment for tired will
hope for sunshine on the morrow;
and eyes have seen this,
solitary shadow upon vacant ground
sighed for splendor of a forest
sent reaching to fill arching shell
to touch the art on vaulted ceilings;
never looking down from all consuming flight
until eyes found eyes, sharing lost moments
finding life in dark skies and shadows
lighting happiness into hidden hurts.
Worthier worlds claimed inspired hands
raising farewell on the cusp of dreams.
Author notes
...you have seen me undressed...not in a physical way, perhaps, but you see me much clearer than my physical endowments, I think...Unkown
In a list
A contest entry
- you have seen me undressed... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
400 points, ended December 24, 2007, 11 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Wow. This is such an amazing piece. I felt like my own hands were reaching for growth, for more, for knowledge, and was truly moved to tears with the intensity of this verse.
"and nourishment for tired will
hope for sunshine on the morrow"
These two lines are especially moving to me and kept me placed in the middle of this piece. Very well done. I am so pleased to see a trophy on this wonderful poem.
Excellent.
~Pamela 
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wonderful take on the prompt. I love the direction you took this, congrats to you on the bronze ~blessings always~ Trisha
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Congrats on a well deserved bronze....I love this piece...Had to come read it again...
Lynda
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sweet
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Beginning of this poem was perfect:
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Touched by warm sun, I am seed in wet ground
something within heeds an unspoken call
reaching for light
stretching forth empty hand;
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You use so nice picture what capture my attention and used theme and your explanation in AN makes it so clear:
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you have seen me undressed..
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This line of explanation is speaking a volume. Good luck.
~Sonja~
. Rewarded 8
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Worthier worlds claimed inspired hands
raising farewell on the cusp of dreams.
You are very deep and touching the high notes of your magical soul through the wings of your strong and heart touching words..I love this piece..well done and thanks for the wonderful entry in my contest...
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Just so beautiful this is...
"until eyes found eyes, sharing lost moments
finding life in dark skies and shadows
lighting happiness into hidden hurts.
Worthier worlds claimed inspired hands
taking farewell on the cusp of dreams."
Breathtaking
Lynda
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