moments together are so sweet
from a hards day work
to your arms at nights
But it never works that way.
When i come home, its an empty house
only late at night you return
but you shrug me off with just one kiss
coldness takes me under
I watch you like a watching soul
not moving
hardly breathing
wondering why you treat me this way
I give you everything i can do
my love, my heart, who i am
I make memories in your mind
etched and sketched never to fade.
When pain flows out
out of these delicate eyes
then only do you look to hear
my cry to you
Why do you treat me like crap
dont you even love me
you promised forever
to love and to cherish
Dignity returning
i turned and walked away
looking at him
so shocked and stunned
i uttered : You'll miss me when im gone
Author notes
Number 10
A contest entry
- Titles, Titles and More Titles!!! by HeavensNewestAngel.
425 points, ended January 5, 2008, 23 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
what ya think?
Comments
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Great
You'll miss me when im gone is the perfect title. The poem is so sad of a love story. It's nice how your poem flows through here. I liked it and I think you are and becoming a wonderful poet. My favorite part is the last line for sure. Thank you for sharing with me.
Blessings
Kelle Marie
stavykm
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This is a great poem. I can sympathize with what you are going through, if this is not real I felt like it was as I was reading it. THank you for putting the number in your authors box. Best of luck in the contest
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been there before baby... and your right...they will miss you... because if your strong enough to walk away then theyll realize that they let a wonderful person go...
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