as thawed flesh stands.
A glance back to cookie-cutter
outlines,
wondering why
only the mold has wings.
Author notes
Word Count: 18
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A contest entry
- snowman by Melissa Gayle.
400 points, ended December 20, 2007, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think (Critical Honesty Appreciated)
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I like what you have done here...a simple and common image inverted in just such a way as to give it an entirely new sense. We're in the middle of a blizzard right now, so perhaps snow angels are on my mind; but this does in five short lines what most poems try for in stanzas and don't quite achieve.
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congrats on the gold..this is SO good...
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and btw..
she'd see the wings if she would only trust herself to spread them.. -
See, because you so often write without pronouns, I tend to put them in when I read your poetry. This is sad, in a haunting kind of way, even an impatient kind of way .. and in a questioning kind of way, that i really like.
The wings are there, even if you don't see them.
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Stop being unfair. [
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*rapes your mind*
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fantastic
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I like the cookie cutter imagery, as this is a fine peice, with a wonderful sit and ponder effect.
Beautiful write!
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Awwwwwww...amazing imagery...Kate..I love the way your mind thinks...this says so much, gives me shivers.. ...truly lovely...
"A snow angel inverts
as thawed flesh stands."..love that imagery..
"wondering why
only the mold has wings." awwee...
excellent...
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