Behind shuteyes, this conscience forms a scale,
weighing theology and science that is tipping back and forth.
“What if?” haunts my psyche,
lingering like a broken satellite floating in dead space.
My conscience is searching for the method of its own origin.
An unquenchable thirst for waters of knowledge, that I am now drowning in.
(First chorus)
Please anyone or anything answers these questions,
that makes the nights all too long and sleepless.
If I sacrificed it all, would the doors of the Akashic records open before me?
I would trade sanity for that pain, feeling the seduction of knowledge.
Starring deeply into a mirror cracked down the middle,
as though I am searching for origin in my own DNA.
Is it a sin to believe in evolution?
Or is sin the sign of an incomplete evolution?
Trying to distinguish between instinct and logic,
are we children of creation or chance?
(Second chorus)
These questions falls like rain, all so suddenly,
this heavy feeling in my chest will not lift.
As I cry out for the omniscience to be the painkiller to my psychology.
I search for them in dream and in reality,
If I really found the knowledge, could I handle truth?
(First chorus Repeat 1 X)
(Second chorus Repeat 1X)
Author notes
I always have this conflicting question about life, why are we here, how did we get here? did God put us here or are here by chance? This poem/song just expresses my feeling about pondering such thoughts.
and special thanks to Francine1991 for the title.
A contest entry
- Music, Sweet Music by theworldisquiethere.
900 points, ended July 14, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I liked how honest and thought-provoking this was
and you did well making it into lyrics, while still keeping it very poetic.
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these are big questions moving already to some presumptions. "I would trade sanity for that pain, feeling the seduction of knowledge..."
Really?
this is a nice turn:
Is it a sin to believe in evolution?
Or is sin the sign of an incomplete evolution?
sure to annoy someone.
the way it is laid out is a little prosy. some of the long phrases could be broken up, but you have that chorus structure, so futher divising may not work for you. Is this meant to be sung?
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Thank you so much for sharing your favorite poem with me. Best of luck in the contest.
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whisper
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Thank you for this very insightful poem. And i agree, questions like that often haunt me as well...and i could really relate to your poem. Thank you again for entering and great write! Keep up the good work!
And best of luck in the contest...
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yay :)
i really like this--the imagery, the wording--
it's awesome--
and i question these things do--it's something we have to do so we can come to our own conclusions -
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I think that this would make an awesome song to hear sung, the imagery is great and the lyrics have such a spark that it just equals out to a great read thanks for entering
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first off... very fitting title
in your poem you ask the eternal question quite eloquently. you've expressed how I've felt many times.
Nicely done
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"are we children of creation or chance?"
Wow. That, in itself, that one single line, spoke to me the most. It has a rhythm almost different from the rest, but that one single line is so powerful to me...so deep in all that it is asking.
"As I cry out for omniscience to be the painkiller to my psychology.
I search for them in dream and in reality,
If I really found the knowledge, could I handle truth?"
...Could anyone?
So deeply wonderful and wondering at the universe around us. I'll pose you a challenge, now; write a piece about where to find the answers, be it in the sunrise or in Heaven or in a tree or a rock...you get it. I like this song, these lyrics, that seem to speak the world of nothing and demand answers of everything. Challenge yourself and write a 'sequel' (sequal?) that could possibly answer these questions...I want to read more. Amazing.
-Vivian
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very deep, i like it
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As lyrics they are defently interesting and fresh and I like that...and that it's so deep...wow.
Awesome title,
Síochán leat
~Mairéad~
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Fantabulous to say the least!!!! BRAVO and BRAVO again!!!!!!!!! I love this piece!!!! Like any good song lyric, it keep you completely interested word by word it pulls you further and further into it's abyss.... It captivates the reader!!!!!!!! Very good piece!!!!!!!
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Your mind, your mind!!! Brilliant!
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O yeah - saw the contest read the words, swallowed the red pill. Inhaled the nebula and felt this 100%. Deep one Bro!!! Mykeeee
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Creative Scientology
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This is absolutely amazing!!! I love the wording. And don't trouble yourself with too much wondering. These questions are answered over time, and if not answered, they are made more obvious But I know exactly how you feel!!!
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such deep thoughts, exquisitly penned and the pleading of answers to these questions echo throughout your words.
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Lots of room for thought here
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I'll send in a name, but...
I really like this.
Your poetry is some of the most well thought out, intelligently, and beautifully articulated works.
It took you a while, but I've still never written anything that compares.
Well done.
Seriously... like, damn...
-Saint
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Well if you come if anything else. Just enter it. You can enter as many times as you want.
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Aye, I'll do that.
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Thanks homie I really appriciate that comment alot ^_^ and you write hell good shit so stop being all humble shit lol!
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I was bein' honest, but,
Haey, I appreciate that.
Thanks, man.
Oh, I sent in one name.
I'll think of another if this one don't cut it.
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i would like to know if i could just list off all the possible names, instead of submitting a hundred times.
for your contest -
Questions without answers, seeking yet not finding, life in its truest form. WE dont know the answers, we are all just the actors in the divine scheme of things. Wonderfully enlightening and many things left to thought. Well done poet. May your ink never run dry for your voice should always be heard.
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