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Into the dark

Spiraling down,
Steps going deeper.
  Further into her soul.
  Lost, unable to find the light.
                              Abandoned



Nichole A.Dustin  (c)
  12/18/2007


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Prompt, 8-16 words, "where did she go?"

My mother taught me if you have nothing nice to say don't say it at all. We are not here as pros, we are here to share our art and have fun. *grin*

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  • IndividualEleven
    December 20, 2007

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    Nice write, simple and deep, with a touch of emotion on the side, nicely written, but if you want to go deeper, you might try even more descriptive words to replace some words like, going, further, lost, ect, and still keep the 8-16 word limit, such as for this line here:

    Steps going deeper

    could be: Steps sinking deeper, or something like that, at least thats my suggestion, you have great talent and inspiration, your first line told me that, amazingly penned, and if you brought the rest of it to that level you'll have something spectacular! well done and thanks for the comment on my piece as well!!


    -Eleven


  • blueyez
    December 20, 2007

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    This has a feel like the last one of yours I read. Well penned!


  • Naridill
    December 19, 2007

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    Very gripping and intense. Love the beauty you have shared with us here.

    Thanks for entering.
    Much luck.