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My Warrior's Eyes

 

Through your eyes I see

     the visions of generation cast.

Children lost and crying

     for their heritage long past.

 

Through your eyes I see

     a life so simple without complication.

Lives full of traditions and history

     yet the victims of discrimination.

 

Through your eyes I see

     the love burning in your soul.

Passion for those who need you

     and for the heart you stole.

 

 

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Written for my Hetane for he is the inspiration for which I write, Nemehotatse Moodayo-Okohke

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  • Treasure 5 gold member
    March 1

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    Thank you for writing this wonderful poem. Your wright we wasn't treated fairly and our land was taken. I wish I knew my heritage of a Micmac. Thank you. It was a pleasure to read.


  • Swan song gold member
    December 30, 2007

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    Wow this was truly awe insiring. Well done! you get my special funny face.


    • freespirit51
      December 30, 2007
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      Swan song

      Thankds for your kind words. I am glad you enjoyed it and thanks for the funny face. If you only knew the story behind that phrase.


  • apoeticinjustice gold member
    December 23, 2007
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    a beautiful expression of love and understanding. Well written.
    Rory

    • freespirit51
      December 23, 2007
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      apoeticinjustice

      thanks for the kind words and I am so glad you enjoyed the poem.


  • Amera gold member
    December 21, 2007

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    I love this wonderful poen you wrote for my AP uncle. I love it and he is such a wonderful man.

    Love,
    Amera♥


    • freespirit51
      December 21, 2007
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      Amera

      Thanks my friend for your kind words and lovely words about my dear Hetane. I do miss him so and writing to or about him helps me feel better. And I agree he is a wonderful man.


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    December 21, 2007

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    My sister your words break my heart for their truths run deep! Children lost and crying for their heritage long past!...Your Hetane will love this! Just as i do


    • freespirit51
      December 21, 2007
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      Tender wolf

      Thanks sweet sister for your encouraging words. These are the things I see when I imagine myself looking into My Warrior's Eyes.


  • Angel w o Wings
    December 19, 2007

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    Through your eyes I see
    the visions of generation cast.
    Children lost and crying
    for their heritage long past.

    This stanza has pushed me onto the floor, with the imagery here it creates a mood of wanting to reach out and help. I don't know, thats just how it makes me feel. Very well written. Thank you for sharing this with us all.


    • freespirit51
      December 19, 2007
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      Angel w o Wings

      Thanks so much for your kind and generouse words my friend. So glad this piece touched your heart.

  • EncounteredEpiphany
    December 18, 2007
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    BRAVO

    The eyes are the windows of the soul,this is a great write!!! LO-AMO SALUTE!!!!!

    • freespirit51
      December 18, 2007
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      encounteredEpiphany

      Thanks for your wonderful comment. So glad you enjoyed it.


  • Soulful Woman silver member
    December 18, 2007

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    This was beautiful. It is amazing how deep we can see into a person through their eyes. Great job expressing your feelings.
    Soulful Woman


    • freespirit51
      December 18, 2007
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      Soulful Woman

      Thanks my friend for your kind words. I am glad you enjoyed and I agree they are the windows.


  • AlfVenison
    December 18, 2007

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    Whatever

    Too many generalities. The second person point of view is a turn off for this reader, who doesn't appreciate being told what he is seeing through his eyes. This thing presumes meaning without meaning anything. Sorry.


    • freespirit51
      December 18, 2007
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      AlfVenison

      Sorry for your displeasure but I think you misread the piece. But you are welcome to your opinions.

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