Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read • Contests • Groups • Learn • Forums • Store • Help
 

Golden Daze

* * * *

As I melt in your kisses of liquid silk
Night streams in, etched with silver
The crimson sky faded long ago
The anger from an earlier time

Washed away with rainwater
Like in an ivory dream, you whisper
Of your faith on this road we walk

We lay on the bed in a blissful caress
On this island of velvet ground
And I think of every star ever fallen
Wondering how many hopes they held

And I drift, in my fluid thoughts
From our home and the ebony earth
Into a dream of flawless fantasy.

* * * *

Author notes

I chose options one through five . Thought it'd be more challenging!

Feel free to give your thoughts on what the poem means to you. I always appreciate other people's views .

A contest entry

Please tell me what you think

    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    • Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments

1 - 7 of 7

  • AlwaysbeBIG
    January 21, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    This is nice...I like it, although I think on line seven it should be "on this road" and not "in this road", but anywho, no biggie.

    "Night streams in, etched with silver
    The crimson sky faded long ago
    The anger from an earlier time"

    "And I think of every star ever fallen
    Wondering how many hopes they held"

    Were good lines...The imagery was great.



    Thanks for entering, and good luck

    Brandon


  • Trixie08
    January 19, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    Great imagery and I loved lines 2 through 5 best. Thank you for entering my contest and this entry was a pleasure to read.


  • zochit2me gold member
    December 20, 2007

    Edit | Reply

    This is a cute poem speaking of love and it's bliss.

    Much luck to you in your contest.

    Love the three roses at top and bottom

    Becky


  • UnchartedPoet
    December 20, 2007

    Edit | Reply
    I love the words that you have chose to do this write. The flow is great you have done a good job of making it dreamy and fantasy almost making it true. Good luck in the contests you are in.

    Jen

  • juno0404
    December 20, 2007

    Edit | Reply

    "We lay on the bed in a blissful caress
    On this island of velvet ground"

    Wow, "velvet ground"
    What can I say?
    Nice, very nice indeed.
    The imagery is simply beautiful.


  • Melissa Burns
    December 19, 2007

    Edit | Reply
    Thank you for entering my humble little contest, I really enjoyed reading this poem - you threw me for a loop, I'd thought I had the judging just about wrapped up - lol Nice.


    • Wild Mustang
      December 19, 2007
      Edit | Reply
      I daresay that's what makes contests so wonderful . Thank you for the compliment, you are too kind !

      * * * *

1 - 7 of 7