Its not the spider,
But the bite and poison
that follows.
Its not the bee,
But the sting and
allergic reaction.
Its not the height,
But the fall and sudden
stop at the end.
Its not the coma,
But the paralyzation.
Its not the fist,
But whos throwing it.
Its not the fire,
But the home it takes away.
Its not the lost love,
But the broken heart you
have to put back together.
Its not the devil,
But the deeds he makes me do.
Its not the bullet,
But the pain of it
peircing you.
Its not going down,
But not being able
to get back up.
Its not death,
But where I go after.
A contest entry
- Got A Crush On A Pretty Pistol [[+Round One+]] by brittany.geeze.
360 points, ended January 23, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Just let me know what you think.
Comments
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I love the depth of this poem, and how you weaved your ideas into it, this poem deserves to get past round 1 in my opinion, good luck in the contest !
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good yob
I think this was really good! I think that you're getting better at your writing and your takeing more time...which does make things more organised...good job
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what a deep, thoughtful poem...i really like it. u must've put alot of time into this poem...good job!!!
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This made me think, what made me think were the lines:
"its not the lost love,
But the broken heart you
have to put back together.
Its not the devil,
But the deeds he makes me do."
&
"Its not going down,
But not being able
to get back up."
Good write
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