The last moment is here.
Time to speak or forever hold my peace.
Time for me to let go of my fear.
As I watch the horrid scene play
In front of my eyes.
At that very moment,
I felt the darkness fall
All around me;
Covering me
Like a blanket.
Tears sting my eyes,
And my scream is rigid.
The only two things the darkness will allow.
I cannot talk,
For I would surely choke.
I know I must be strong,
But I can't hold out,
Even just a week long.
My loved one falling forever,
Never again to touch the ground.
As he descends,
Only time enough to speak a few words,
And in a hurry, he spoke,
"Do not be afraid to go on
And live
Once I am gone."
I try to catch him.
Grab him.
Do everything I possibly can to prevent him,
From falling into a darker place.
A place that has no light.
A place that lost its will to shine.
As I try to reach his hand,
And barely, scarcely touch it.
I look upon him,
And for the first time I realized,
How his face it so tenderly beloved.
How his smile is so generous and kind.
How his voice is so soft-spoken.
How his heart mixed with mine.
And that moment,
Though that moment came as shock,
Seemed to last forever, time seemed to stop ticking,
And stand still.
I hear his voice singing with uncertainty,
A kind of thoughtful insecurity you can't hear with human ears,
But only through hearts connected such as his and mine.
And for a moment I wondered if I should jump with him,
Instead of bearing the grief that would soon come to follow,
But I remembered a part of his last sentence,
'Don't be afraid to live.'
I know others have felt it;
The stinging, sharp feeling that happens,
When you watch a loved one die,
And know you could have prevented it.
This guilt stays with me all the time
And will stay with me through all my life.
I know it will.
I wish I would have caught him.
This moment has become so dreadfully overwhelming,
That when I close my eyes, even just blink,
An image of him is shown
On a projector inside my head,
And I'm forced to realize,
Once again,
That he's dead.
I watch him fall again.
I wish I would see, instead;
Him in all of his should-be glory,
The last words escaping from his mouth
In just enough time for me to hear them.
"Don't be afraid to go on and live once I'm gone." he said.
How can I go on?
Knowing had I been able to reach,
Just a little,
Just a little,
Farther,
That you would still be here today?
I can ask
But I'll
Never get an answer.
I'm close to becoming insane.
I should say whats on my mind,
But every single one
Of my efforts are in vain.
I've tried to imagine that all of this was a dream,
That it was inside my mind,
But nothing works.
I can't find a way to escape.
A way to bring him back to life.
I've lost my ability to over come great challenges,
Or more so my will.
I feel like that dark place
I let him fall into.
My will so precious
That without it, I'm dead.
So as I lay my head down tonight,
My mind filled with that torturous memory,
Of that unbelievable day,
I wonder
When I will die and meet my lover,
Once again.
Author notes
option #10 icture inspired
A contest entry
- 114th Contest by Tarja.
450 points, ended December 20, 2007, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
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AMAZING!
Wow! this is amazing, my head was getting closer and closer to the screen as it went on.
I loved it! No wonder it got the gold!
Very impressed, one of the best Poems i've seen so far!!
Laura.
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I see why this won gold. This was a beautiful poem! Love how vivid the imagery was. Congrats!
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Personality is edgy. I feel more poetic themes could've been slipped in nicely but it is beautiful and congrats on previous gold.
Thanks for entering.
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Thanks for entering my contest and best of luck!
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this is a beautiuflly written peice which holds deep powerful words in it. well done and best of luck
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This is a beautiful poem
I love the poem and I think you have talent, however this is much to long for the book. please go to the group and read guide lines and I look forward to reading others.
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lol
Yeah i know. I posted this before the guidelines and rules come out, and haven't had time to remove it from the list..sorry. ^^'
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I almost cried reading this. I always hate sad endings.
I love the imagery and the theme here. I love how you ended it... With the girl unsure of how to move on. Your last lines are absolutely amazing.
I can tell you're going to go far in these rounds of contests.
Thank you so much for entering my contest.
Always,
Cassie
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Thanks you very much!
I'm glad to know that you enjoyed my poems!
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Wow This is really Long. Congratulations on the Gold Trophy. This also is very nice, Good luck in I don't know if this something that we are looking for Have to wait till the others read. Excellent write though
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Thanks.
I appricate it ^_^
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impressive
i never would have thought a sream could be rigid, but it fits
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lol
It's my weird way of thinking. Takes some adjusting; espically when it comes to my writing in poetry.
and Thanks for the applause!
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I think you managed to give it the required personality here. Alot of effort certainly went into this one. You emerged with an awesome piece... Congrats, on the Gold!
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Thanks!
Thank you very much! I'm glad you enjoyed it!
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Well..... it's very hard to say how I feel about this poem... I do like that you took the picture and created a story behind it... but I also think that it could be written out better... maybe more imagery is what it needs... don't remove this... just go through it again and try to put more personality into it...
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Okay thanks!
I will! It was something done in only 15 minutes, and I suppose I should've taken a little more time on the imagry. Do you want my to message you when I've finished editing it, so you don't have to come back and click this over and over again to see if I have?
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